Narrator: The world is made up of three zones. Above is the gods zone, in it dwell the immortal gods. Gods are omnipotent beings that are said to be the creators of all mortals. Below is the devils zone, in it dwell the immortal devils. Devils are devious omnipotent beings that are said to cause all the disasters that befall mortals. And finally in the middle is the mortal zone, in it dwell the mortals.
Narrator: Time moves differently in the zones, in both the gods zone and the devils zone, one day is equal to one year in the mortal zone. Because of this gods and devils tend to travel into the mortal zone, where they are immune to the effects of aging, and thus can't die of old age. A god or devil can't be killed by a mortal only another god or devil. While in the mortal zone gods and devils can start whole religions that are dedicated to them, giving them an extra amount of power.
Narrator: Back in the past gods and devils went to the mortal zone in order to gain more power, but wars began to start, and many mortals were killed. After that the gods and devils agreed on a rule that neither side was allowed to just freely gone between the realms. A ritual was created and became required for any immortal to leave into the mortal zone, and doing so would cause them to lose most of their powers. Those who did go into the mortal realm were considered criminals and not allowed back, but were able to gain back their power if they learned where their powers came from. If one couldn't figure it out, then they would lose all their power and become mortal. It was this that keep most immortals to stay in their own zones, and mess with the mortals in different ways. It is debated about whether the gods gave us are individual appearances to give us uniqueness, or if it was the work of the devils wanting us to judge based on appearance. One thing that is known is that both the gods and devils play with the mortals, granting them powers, or giving them curses just out of boredom.
Narrator: Even though there were risks involved, some gods and devils have traveled to the mortal zone, for one reason or another. Among them was a god by the name of Aphrodite, who about a month ago arrived in the mortal zone. This is the tale of her and the women she meets along the way, and the adventures they go on.
A sunny day in a small village, kids running around laughing and playing, while the adults talk, and perform their daily activities.
Wendy goes running out to a field and begins to search for flowers to pick. She smiles when she found a pink one (her favorite color) and picks the flower. Excited, she turns around and starts to run back to show her mother, but stops when she hears a scream. She stands staring in horror as her village is burning. Tears begin to form in her eyes.
???: Well, what have we got here?
Wendy turns around, behind her is a tall, rough, ugly looking bandit with a short sword in his hand.
Bandit 1: (Smiling) Looks like you got no home to go back to, eh girly?
Wendy screams and runs away.
Bandit 1: Were you running girly?
The bandit chases after Wendy with his sword raised. The bandit catches up to Wendy and prepares to strike. Wendy closes her eyes, and then the bandit screams in pain. Wendy opens her eyes, the bandit lies on the ground, a bloody gash on his chest.
Standing in front of Wendy was Katana, her sword dripping blood.
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Katana: (Kneeling down) You are safe now, stay by me and I will keep you safe.
Wendy(Crying): My home, it's... it's on fire. My mom and dad are there.
Katana: Do not worry, little one, your village is being taken care off as we speak. My name is Katana, what is yours?
Wendy: Wendy.
Katana (Wiping away Wendy's tears): Well Wendy, my companions are taking care of your village. So there is no need for you to cry now.
Meanwhile, in the village, the raging fire has calm down as Ember, stands in the middle of the village, her arms out in front of her.
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The fire flies into Ember's hands and disappeared, until all the fire in the village has been put out. A bandit approaches Ember from behind, sword raised ready to strike. Before the bandit can strike, he is tangled up in vines, that sprouted from the ground. Ember turns around and aims her right hand at the bandit, the bandit and the vines were engulfed in flames. The bandit now charred black, with smoke coming of him, fall forward to the ground, the vines turn to ash and blow away in the wind.
Standing behind the burned man is Rose.
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Rose: Really? Just had to burn my vines, hothead? Next time I'll just let them kill you.
Ember: I didn't need you, shorty!
Rose: Don't call me short, matchstick!
Rose walks up to Ember.
Ember: How about shrimp!
Ember's hair turns into flames. Ember and Rose start shouting at each other, as a bandit with his sword raised, runs at the girls.
Bandit 2: Maybe instead of arguing with each other, you should pay attention!
Rose and Ember: Stay out of this!
The bandit is hit with a ball of fire, and multiple vines. The bandit falls to the ground as Rose and Ember go back to arguing with each other. Soon the two girls notice they are surrounded by ten bandits each holding swords.
Rose: Let's continue this later, looks like we have party crashers.
Ember: (Smirking) Who ever beats the most wins?
In the village a spiraling portal appears and Aphrodite walks out.
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Aphrodite lets out a yawn. A bandit with his hair on fire runs behind Aphrodite, screaming. The bandit runs around Aphrodite two times. On his third time running in front of Aphrodite, she sticks her foot out tripping the bandit. The bandit falls to the ground face first, and the fire on his head goes out.
Ember: And that makes five, looks like I win!
Rose: Do the math oven top, there were ten of them. If you beat five then that means I also beat five, so we're tied.
Aphrodite looks over and sees Rose and Ember arguing. As the two girls are arguing the unconscious bodies of ten bandits lay on the ground. Half are burned, while the other half are tangled in vines.
Aphrodite: What'd I miss?
Rose and Ember stopped arguing, and turned their heads to look at Aphrodite. Embers hair returns to normal, and the two girls run up to Aphrodite, with their arms open.
Rose and Ember: Dite!
Rose and Ember wrap their arms around Aphrodite, hugging her on opposite sides.
Ember: You're awake!
Aphrodite: Yes I am. What's going on?
Rose and Ember let go of Aphrodite.
Ember: This village was attacked by bandits, so we stopped to help them.
Aphrodite looks around the burnt village. Around them the villagers had gathered and looks at them in awe, some sporting burns, others with bleeding wounds.
Aphrodite: Rose, can you tie up the bandits, for me?
Rose: Leave it to me!
Rose heads off towards the bandits. Aphrodite holds out her hands, which begin to glow pink.
Aphrodite: Therapeftikí Agápi!
A pink dome surrounds the village, healing all the villagers injuries and fixing the destroyed buildings. The dome then disappears, and Aphrodite lets out a big yawn.
Wendy: Mommy! Daddy!
Wendy runs into the village, with Katana following behind her.
Wendy's mother: Wendy!
Wendy's mother kneels down and Wendy runs into her arms, Wendy's father knees down and hugs both of them.
Wendy's father: We were so worried! What happened? Where were you?
Wendy: I went to find you a flower mommy. Then this man came after me, but then a tall lady with a sword, saved me.
Katana: My love, you are awake!
Katana runs towards Aphrodite, and hugs her.
Aphrodite: Katana, you're crushing me!
Katana lets go of Aphrodite, and bows.
Katana: I apologize, my love.
Rose brings over the last of the bandits, wrapped up in vines, his arms behind his back, and a vine tied around his mouth. Rose forces the bandit to sit next to ten other bound bandits, half of them burned.
Rose: Here's the last of them. I think this ones suppose to be the boss.
Aphrodite: Why do think that?
Rose: He kept saying he's the boss. So he's either the boss, or he's trying to deceive me. Anyway I got tired of hearing him talk, so I gagged him.
Aphrodite: Thanks, Rose.
Rose: (smiling) It was no big deal.
Ember: All you did was tie up bandits that I already beat.
Rose: You beat? Did you forget we fought them together and I took out half?
Ember: (Hair igniting) How bout we settle whose the best, right now?
Rose: Fine by me!
Katana: That is enough! You are both grown women, I suggest you act like it.
The fire on Ember's hair goes out.
Rose: Fine.
Ember: Whatever.
Wendy and her parents walk up to Katana.
Wendy's father: (Bowing) Thank you for saving our daughter. If there is anything we can do for you, please don't hesitate to ask.
Katana: (Blushing) Please, think nothing of it. I was happy to do it. You do not need to repay me.
Wendy's father: Please let us do something to repay you.
Aphrodite: Do you have food? I'm hungry!
Wendy's father: Yes, the food storage luckily was spared from the fire. As thanks for saving the village and my daughter, we will throw you all a feast.
Aphrodite: Yay, feast!
The bandit with the gag, starts to struggle, and bites through the vine gag. The bandit spits out parts of vine, as he notices Aphrodite looking at him.
Bandit leader: What are looking at bitch?
Katana pulls out her sword and points it at the bandits throat.
Katana: Shall I execute him, my love?
Aphrodite: No, it's okay.
Katana returns her sword to its sheath.
Aphrodite: So, what do with them?
Bandit leader: (Smirking) I got an idea. Let us go and we'll give you girls the time of your lives.
Aphrodite: (Cocking her head, and smiling) Yeah... no! You're not my type.
Bandit leader: How about you red? Wanna come back with us, I promise it will be fun.
Ember: Ew, no way creep!
Ember turns and walks away. The Bandit leader breaks the vines, and with his sword raised, his charges at Aphrodite. The bandit leader slashes Aphrodite in the chest, and she falls to the ground.
The bandit leader grabs Ember, pointing his sword at her throat.
Bandit leader: You try anything, and red here doesn't make it. Alright boys, get up! We're leaving. And red here gonna join us.
The other bandits stand up, their arms still tied up, and start to walk towards their leader. Ember rolls her eyes, and ignites her hair. The bandit leader screams, and throws Ember to the ground. The bandit leader turns to run, but before he can get far, he is turned into a frog. The frog croaks and hops away.
Everyone turns to see Aphrodite standing up, an angry look in her eyes. Aphrodite turns her head to look at the other bandits, who all sit down on the ground, and give scared smiles.
Aphrodite turns to look at Wendy's father, with a smile.
Aphrodite: When's the feast...
Aphrodite falls to the ground face first. Everyone runs over to her, except the bandits.
Katana: My love!
Wendy's mother: Is she alright?
Aphrodite: (Sleeping) More food, please.
Later that night, the entire village was gathered outside around a fire, the villagers eat, laugh, dance, and drink. Aphrodite sits on the ground with plates full of food, stuffing her face as Katana, Ember, and Rose sat by her and eat their own smaller portions. Wendy and her parents sit across from them.
Wendy's father: I'm glad to see you're alright.
Wendy's mother: You gave us all quite a scare.
Aphrodite: More food!
Rose: Dite, just used to much of her power, and had to recharge.
Wendy's father: Power? Does that mean she was given a gift of the gods?
Aphrodite: Nope. I am a god.
Wendy's Parents and Wendy: What!
Wendy's mother: You're really a god?
Aphrodite: Yup!
Wendy: So cool!
Wendy's dad: Why are you here? In our village?
Katana: We were just passing through. We are searching for something.
Wendy's mother: Oh, what is it?
Rose: We have no clue.
Aphrodite: I can't remember!
Wendy's mother: You can't remember?
Wendy's father: If you don't know what you are looking for, then how will you know when you find it?
Aphrodite: I'll know! I believe that when I see it, I'll be able to remember. All I know is it's super important.
Wendy's father: So, you're just searching blindly?
Ember: Pretty much.
Wendy's mother: Well, we wish you luck, and hope you find it soon.
In the morning it was time for the girls to leave the village, they said their goodbyes to Wendy and her parents.
Katana: Are you sure you don't want us to take care of the rest of the bandits for you?
Wendy's father: Don't worry we've contacted the Angels, and they will be here soon, to take them in.
Wendy: Miss Katana, when I get older, I'm gonna be as strong as you, and then go on my own adventure!
Katana: (Smiling) Well then I leave the protection of this village in your hands.
Wendy: You can count on me!
Aphrodite: C'mon, let's go!
Katana heads over to Aphrodite, and the girls wave as they leave the village.
Narrator: With that our story begins what adventures await Aphrodite and her girls only time and this story will tell.
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Chapter notes:823Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ5jbpjsJJqU
My first rewrite for my series using a new writing style, whether or not it worked, please let me know.
I changed some dialog to try and make it sound better I hope that I was able to accomplish that.
I also changed the scene where Aphrodite tells Rose to help the injured, as later on in the story Aphrodite reveals she has healing powers, so it felt weird to have her ask Rose to do it.
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This is a link to the original: https://www.fictionpress.com/s/3352240/1/Aphrodite-s-Harem
I ask that if you have any criticism, please let me know. I want to hear what you think of the characters and how this chapter was, what worked and what needs work.
Thank you for reading and I hope you enjoyed.
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