Don't give me that face. 778Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡTH5d0vI1Nn
Jez.
(I'm not saying you can't, just making a point so read on and the point will be made.)778Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡEWu5xBpe91
Ehhhh wrong. 1+1=2 not purple. 😉
In fact, passive voice is just a sentence in that the object appears as the subject of the sentence. 778Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ1Yf7B4Y0D7
When a sentence is passive the subject of the sentence isn’t doing the action.
"Yo door! You're leading this sentence and closing yourself. Got it? Good door!" 😜
Example:
The jar of farts was given to me by my grandmother.
Passive as the jar is the object of the sentence and, the speaker, the subject. There is no ‘to be’.
How to fix this mess O' worms:
Stop it all really. Seriously.
Many people believe passive voice is always ‘weak’ or ‘bad’. (Ooh it's soo bad. 😆 )
It is another tool for a writer to use, a touch here, there—think drops not pools. As passive voice can at times effectively convey a certain rhythm or mood.
Occasionally the object of a sentence is the most important part. It all depends on what you want/need the reader to focus on during that scene.
A passive sentence construction can also help to show a character’s passivity.
An active sentence the subject of the sentence is taking the action. 778Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡlvW4tuuQ7Y
So? Yup. The characters lead and do things the objects don't. Characters first and you can't go wrong.
When passive voice is used the wording becomes awkward and unclear. Often a good cridic will state that the wording is 'AWK' (awkward) and and even a little on why. Avoid this mistake so they can help spot the more important mistakes like bad dialogue or plot mistakes.
The reader shouldn't have to work hard to figure out what you’re saying. Easy to read writing means you put in the effort to make it that way. 778Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡWDdB69MuSa
How to fix this? It isn't hard the more you do it the more your 'writers eye' will spot it until a passive sentance sticks out like a obvious grammar error. (doe/dough) Hea.
Find the sentence's subject. Is the subject doing the action? Yes? Great leave it. If not rewrite it so it does.
Wrong:
In a huff the door slammed behind Jasper. That vile little harlet will beg me when...
Whoh! The door is alive and slammed itself? Hot s*it, call the media! 😆
Correct:
Jasper slammed the door and huffed. That vile little harlet will beg me when...
You get the idea.
Be bold, write boldly don't hide behind the passave voice, push past any insecuritys that crop up or that little voice that says "You suck."
Tell it shut up and keep writing.
With writing give it your all or fall into the abyss with the aspiring writers that just talk about writing.
No more passive voice!778Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡAoLB3dKAD2
Take your character’s and go wuth the story don't waffle, worry, or what if.
Just write. 778Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ8Lq3h1sX6z
What you really want to say will come out. It might be under a bunch of crud, but it's there.
Make writing with layers; not shallow ditch the passive.
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