Firstly, I just want to say I'm impressed.
You all ran with such incredible ideas/themes.
1st place: Emoddess your writing has improved SO much! You do a great deal of "show don't tell" which is engaging to read. I appreciate how you set up your characters as though we know them with details that allows readers to fill in the gaps.... your poor characters, I wonder if Elsie heals. Or sees a physiologist.
2nd: Sarah... you played with so many concepts and ideas that are so hot in our culture right now. I'm a fan. I liked your character, and the historical side you threw in there. If I could have two winners you would be up there. 605Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ7YdJJQt4YR
3rd: Ria you took betrayal and ran with it. If you had fleshed out your characters a little bit more so we understood the trust put into Elliot the betrayal would have hit harder. It's amazing how 1000 words can both seem like too many words and not enough at the same time. Out of all the entries yours had the biggest jolt! Well done :)
Special mention:
LovePenquins ... I cannot believe how many metaphors and similes you put into your entry. It was awesome. A tad hard to read, but a fun read for a visual reader such as myself. It was like reading someone's diary and the raw pain and emotion thrown in there.
Chloe - if you become a film writer hit me up. That was intense! I want to know how it all started or how/why the betrayal ended with witches revolting/ dying dramatic deaths. So much information that was touched on without explaining the relevance. But ideas were good and you had great descriptions, especially changing settings. 605Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡOIKT7c3eTk
Note: Sorry if I sound like a teacher... I am one. 605Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡNhlB8iTXEn
BlueMoon OUT!
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