作者妳好700Please respect copyright.PENANAC15njg04Pi
受到妳的邀请700Please respect copyright.PENANA0mSHuVbLW4
稍微看了下这本佩姬700Please respect copyright.PENANAXx8ytSHrwc
确实有意思
说说自己对这小说的看法700Please respect copyright.PENANAzrbaBR3C3L
你写了关于主角前世一堆东西700Please respect copyright.PENANArgiDv8xpr8
现世一堆东西700Please respect copyright.PENANAq30qXlFIDU
其实就很简单一个道理700Please respect copyright.PENANAsXZOvqSHqO
主角想要被爱700Please respect copyright.PENANAido4cfITMi
佩姬採取行动的理由都是被爱700Please respect copyright.PENANA3TGfrPmaXl
男主卢克爱700Please respect copyright.PENANAt3As5MKj8E
主角就爱回去700Please respect copyright.PENANAbHBybLHV0x
女主伊莎爱700Please respect copyright.PENANAFufTNhJUOO
主角就爱回去700Please respect copyright.PENANARZ6wfvzlVS
主角对她爸妈也是一样的道理700Please respect copyright.PENANACVFOoyqdJN
想要被爱是佩姬的主题700Please respect copyright.PENANAwOTtZGcgk0
主角性别不是问题700Please respect copyright.PENANA1Nu6OSWgIN
内心冲突不是问题700Please respect copyright.PENANA0ff6ZVxwY1
主角被爱就迎刃而解700Please respect copyright.PENANAJt9jxBqWlM
看不懂这点整部书就看不了700Please respect copyright.PENANAl9WmCtc4eF
妳的书乏人问津是这道理700Please respect copyright.PENANAo6lqd0DfTs
作者妳说主角口是心非700Please respect copyright.PENANAV6HtWYDHUJ
欸我说这不对700Please respect copyright.PENANA3EAU8iW033
这明摆着口非心也非700Please respect copyright.PENANA1dOJnaHoFX
瞧瞧那配角艾德兰700Please respect copyright.PENANAGDY8QUcoDV
主角说不喜欢他还给整个欲擒故纵700Please respect copyright.PENANAj85UtSFghs
给他瞧瞧内裤还奢望他拿来当配菜700Please respect copyright.PENANA6HCqUctD3S
如果不是渴望被爱的人不做这种事的700Please respect copyright.PENANA9JGHO4rgeY
为了被爱700Please respect copyright.PENANAqB7pfVMxCN
连原本的性别都不要了700Please respect copyright.PENANAmZ4GR3yXGt
这主角疯的傻的700Please respect copyright.PENANAi2ndfA5KPC
可瞧她是个妹子所以没啥问题
说说其它角色700Please respect copyright.PENANAYLyxigK9sT
女主伊莎700Please respect copyright.PENANAwwnomKjuyQ
单纯的色鬼700Please respect copyright.PENANAFn97MKG5US
作者您没讲 可我猜应有病娇属性700Please respect copyright.PENANAuf7eO3Sp8N
黑化可能
艾德兰700Please respect copyright.PENANAWTGGU62Gjm
可怜虫阿700Please respect copyright.PENANAZqEPUD2en9
这角色最可怜的就是想当好人可当不了700Please respect copyright.PENANAf6uhPJQcm8
妳说解释不够700Please respect copyright.PENANAy5ic17XH5r
我到觉得清楚700Please respect copyright.PENANAlO5V6IvSZL
这种事常见的阿
男主卢克才是那个写得不够700Please respect copyright.PENANArEopcxZhkn
他为啥强700Please respect copyright.PENANA62k0XKHtMp
妳啥都没讲700Please respect copyright.PENANA7FoInCbaQg
这才是问题
主角老妈是佩姬这故事最好明白700Please respect copyright.PENANAL6Iyjbkczl
也是除主角外最明白的角色700Please respect copyright.PENANAL2K7JmJ3mJ
她就拿来爱主角的700Please respect copyright.PENANABprNGDL7tX
功能性角色
还有其他许多700Please respect copyright.PENANAbGOiQosnv5
我就不提了
妳在作品裡回收的台词很多700Please respect copyright.PENANAnrErnryyyo
可以瞧见妳的苦心700Please respect copyright.PENANAz203BZMOrm
我觉得这没必要700Please respect copyright.PENANAs1fTlSX34l
好的台词提一次够了700Please respect copyright.PENANANYVC6XVGDE
重提令人厌烦
妳说别的评文说设定不严谨700Please respect copyright.PENANAhvHDcityy2
我倒嫌设定囉嗦700Please respect copyright.PENANAe7D06TUOA2
空白很重要700Please respect copyright.PENANAiGQji19MYe
没明白有没明白的好处700Please respect copyright.PENANANw7gSZ6muF
而且妳作品裡的问题都自洽其说700Please respect copyright.PENANAJRCABcpahd
这就够了
谢谢作者妳邀我看这书700Please respect copyright.PENANALFObbtLR3D
我还会继续看的700Please respect copyright.PENANAGdltI2z0Qp
确实好看700Please respect copyright.PENANAxf3ZSTrXOp
希望你这能写完700Please respect copyright.PENANA6QzMQf6ovt
能放上起点不700Please respect copyright.PENANAHDT007vXwV
这样我也好跟亲友推荐
700Please respect copyright.PENANAXheZX8t1Pm
作者回應:700Please respect copyright.PENANADP17xrfTvK
感謝評文者看到了隱藏在故事中的細節,700Please respect copyright.PENANArNozv4L9tw
有些段落在經您提點之後才發現是這麼一回事,700Please respect copyright.PENANAarNSKmfIyy
潛藏在文章中的祈願被人挖出來有稍稍一點害羞700Please respect copyright.PENANAGh5nSwaXvz
感謝你的評文700Please respect copyright.PENANAzjQrllsoBV
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