I can't stop writing, but I probably learn more about writing when I read 100 words that belong to another person than when writing 1,000 words of my own. Everyone here has an interesting tale to tell, but it's never really their idea that's the problem so much as they way it's conveyed. That said, it's always good to think about every detail of your writing. How a character says things, consistency, jumping from one moment to the next, the emotions you're trying to evoke from your reader, etc.
Have you written a death scene, before? Well, when you write one, is it suppose to have an impact? The importance of a character can often be displayed by how quick their death passes through the pages.
Anyways, I like to give advice or editing to people who directly ask for it. Makes me know they care about their work, therefore I should care. Same goes to you. I welcome assistance. These felt like things worth mentioning in a blog.