Thank you so much for entering this contest!! I know I made you wait a while for the results, and I apologize for that. Homework and tests were rough this week, and my procrastination habits did not help. But anyway, I loved all of your submissions so much, which is why I have some additional comments to add to each one!
Creativity/Originality: 10 points
Grammar: 5 points
Complying with the rules: 5 points
I also realized that the poems can’t be judged on Grammar (especially the free verses, when grammar isn’t applied). So that will be replaced with points based on overall imagery, emotion, and word choice.
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#1: “The girl with the beautiful hands” by Saurna
OK, the first entry did not disappoint at all. I love this story and your writing style! The opening drew me in, and my interest stayed until the very end. The only feedback is some mild grammar errors. Literally, that’s it. Some sentences need commas (especially in dialogue). But the story itself is amazingly written, so thank you for entering!
Total: 17.5 pts
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#2: “How perfect”by JazzyKitty
Oh wow! That story was very interesting. I love the repeated use of the phrase; it gives a lot of effect. You certainly did amazing with the prompt. However, it would’ve been easier to read if you separated your sentences into paragraphs. Stick with one idea in one paragraph, then make a new paragraph for the next. Just know, either way, I enjoyed it a lot. Might even be eerie enough for Halloween!
Total: 13.5 pts
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#3: “a reflection”by bunnybear
Oh gosh, your poems are always impeccable and outstanding! I love reading free-verse poems like this one. I’m pretending that someone is reading this out loud and it’s giving me cold hard chills right now…And I can understand this poem to a whole other level. Thank you for entering!
Total: 17 pts
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#4: “PERFECT” by Mia Flame
I totally understand when you said you weren’t in the mood for writing a story then. I love how you still managed to come up with not one, but TWO amazing poems! And you got a chuckle out of me at the last line of Poem #2, haha. Poem #1 is simple, but I love it! The last three lines were my favorite!
By the way, I haven't mentioned anything about putting two poems in one entry in the rules. Maybe it would’ve been better to separate them as different entries, despite the short word count. Still, I won't deduct points for that ^^
Total: 14 pts
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#5: “The Risk of Your Perfect” by MarkTwain2.0
Wow…I’m definitely not tearing up over the third and last stanza…And the image that goes along with it is beautiful. What is amazing is that this can make a beautiful song AND a beautiful story as well!
Be right back, going to create some scenarios in my mind with a non-existing character now.
Total: 16 pts
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#6: “Perfection: A woman’s experiment” by Saurna
Thanks for the second entry, Saurna! I did not expect to read something like this and it blows my mind…
Total: 17 pts
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#7: “The perfect society” by Bookinspired22
The capital letters were clever! I’m really intrigued by this…Are they sending this help message to someone outside of their dystopian society in hopes they’d be saved? I need to read the full story right now! So good! And I won't deduct points for capitalization because I found it super creative. Just a few mild punctuation errors and misspellings.
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#8: “As I made you to be” by Lamington
Oh my gosh…the ending. This is so creative and emotional and I can’t get enough of it! I hope you don’t mind a bit of feedback though.
Some of the semicolons were placed incorrectly. One example from the story: “It was dark and quiet; perfect to stay clear and keep my head down with a toddler in tow.” Make sure both sides of the semicolon are independent clauses. I think a comma works better in a lot of the semicolons you’ve placed. No worries though. I often get confused with em dashes.
Thanks for including a warning at the beginning as well ^^
Total: 18 pts
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#9: “pretty perfect” by juggernaut62
I get what you are saying! I mean, nobody’s perfect. But if someone saw you with love in their eyes even when you’re not wearing makeup, even when you’re broken down and not wearing your smiles, they love the real you. And that person would want to get to know that side of you because your beauty hasn’t changed to them. Thanks for sharing!
By the way, you reminded me of this quote: "I saw that you were perfect, and so I loved you. Then I saw that you were not perfect and I loved you even more."
Total: 13.5 pts
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#10: “Unus sine culpa perfectio est” by Clovers
Oh wow! This was really good! I could see this story as an introduction to a novel. I am obsessed with this line here: "Rather, you have to tuck them away inside and allow them to build up in your chest even when you feel like you're about to burst.” I really enjoyed reading this!
Total: 16.5 pts
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TIES FOR 3RD:
~ “a reflection” - bunnybear228Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡWAcDkaZUd9
~ “Perfection: A woman’s experiment” - Saurna228Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡFvJpCxZuNJ
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Honorable Mentions/Personal Favorites (in no particular order):228Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡSQqGYjD0Z6
~ “The Risk of Your Perfect” by MarkTwain2.0 ~
~ “Unus sine culpa perfectio est” by Clovers ~228Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡuPc5rS5J3S
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Again, thank you so much for entering! It was so fun rereading through all of your stories and poems. You guys are amazingly talented. I hope to see you in my future contests!
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