James 1/5
How do I say this, um... It's a good paragraph, I suppose, but is it really a story? It just states your name is James and other details like that, but there's no more to it. I'm sorry if I offend you, it's just... *makes hand motions because I can't describe*
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Master of Water 3,5/5
I can't even translate it to words how much I enjoyed this one. It's so simple and relaxing, and the ending makes you want to know more. If you make a short story or book about this, don't forget to tell me! XD
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Issue 3 4/5
Let's see. It's realistic, check. It's got a good story line, check. It's got great grammar--better than mine, at least--check. A few typos here and there, but not something that you can't fix. I really like this one, so if you plan to make a story for it, tell me! I'd make the time to read. :3
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Bystander 5/5
This story is my favourite one so far. It's so detailed and I love that. It makes me understand the point of view of the main character exceptionally well and the reasons behind is actions are quite acceptable too. Also, the "fighting" scene thingy is so good.
It shows that someone can change and I love it. Keep up the good work!
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My Future Death Love 2/5
Uh, since you asked for a comment, I think your story is great. It has a great plot, but would be better if you edited it. No offense, just being honest here, it's quite hard to read the way it is now.
By the way, my favourite line was "I am not willing to die for you", it just sounds great! c:
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The Girl and the Wind 3/5
Ahh, the story is written so elegantly. The thing is, I just feel like it's incomplete, ya'know? There could've been more to it. I mean, talking to wind is great but if you're just chatting with it, what's the fun in that? But it's a great story nevertheless, the kind when it just reminds you to be you and no one can say a thing about it. It's awesome!
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Charm 2/5
Oooh, I love the picture you put in your entry. Kind of reminded me of Medusa. I would love it if you put in the scene of how she persuaded the guy for that Volvo, that would've been so cool! :3
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Gone on Beyond 3,5/5
This one makes me kinda scared, actually. Don't tell me Jen is gonna drown herself or something like that, please. Especially because that's like my name (Jeniffer). Good story, nevertheless. Although it feels incomplete. 👍
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What good are these? 3/5
I don't know what to feel about this. The plot is good, almost everything is good, but it scares me. It scares me. *pouts*
Well, you've missed some quotation marks and it's quite hard to read but again, that's not something you can't easily fix. :D
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Fire 3,5/5
Isn't it quite ironic that an IcePrincess (writer's username) is writing an entry titles Fire? No? :D
Why is it that I always like these kind of stories are incomplete? Is it because I'm too greedy or something? :c
Anyways, it gives me an Elsa vibe and stuff. I just really want to know what happens after. 😭😭😭
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Matter over Mind 5/5
This is my other favourite one! I love Joy so much. She's so full of... You know, joy.
Anyways, this story is so great I can't even put it into words.
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insaniam convertunt 3/5
The paragraphs are way too long for my liking, it makes it hard to read. Few typos, it's normal.
The story line, Oh my Gods, the story line is so unique. I've honestly never read anything like this (considering I mostly read fanfics XD). I was kinda confused at first but I finally understood and it was so good. Lux is so evil. 0.0
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I'm sorry I just got to announcing this today! Life has been so busy.
I know this is completely out of subject but I just had a piano competition and I'm pretty sure I embarrassed myself so bad.
I was so intimidated by the other players because their songs were so complicated and I tried telling myself my song was okay for my age (almost all of them were older than me) but I couldn't calm down and had a stomachache.
In the end, I couldn't play well at all. My teacher already told me to take deep breaths before starting but all words and tips from everyone flew from my head the moment I sat down in front of those people.
I went blank in the middle of the song and I just stopped for like 2 seconds and it was so noticeable. I'm pretty sure they were all snickering in their mind. My mum told me many times to just keep playing, but my finger just paused from how nervous I was.
Hell, my whole body was shaking so bad, I think I'm traumatized.
I just want to share this...
Good luck to all the winners and sorry for the very late announcement!
-J. x
