Frances... this is a masterpiece. You captured the style and time used with such authentic grace right down to descriptions. Grammer was perfect, so much so that you made me forget about it entirely. I became intertwined with a protagonist who was no innocent, yet I found myself pitying and relating to her. I was enchanted by this piece. Well done.
VIRIDIANMIND; I enjoyed your piece greatly. Such a realistic and curious protagonist, one easily relatable. I applaud your descriptions, cleverly detailed and interesting; "a man who liked his cigarettes like he liked his women" is excellent and I hope to read more of such work as you mature in your writing! I suggest cutting down your paragraphs and shortening your sentences for a more easy read, but you are definitely talented. Your ending was unexpected and breathlessly beautiful. 720Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡsXg3MmecUq
Saria you are a master of short stories! You captured the essence of a short story and spun together a tale that had your readers leaning in expectantly. You cleverly left hints that had me pondering the meaning behind them as I read, leading your reader down the forest path to something unexpected. Grammar was excellent, adding to the sense of "this author knows where we're going." The reader was never stranded within the plot, with language that any age could understand. The ending left the reader with a sense of curtain call, as well as a promise for more mischief. Outstanding work! 720Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡjdH41DaEky
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Monos D.O.A you terrify me beyond words. The way your mind works is both outlandish and exciting! I never know what I'm getting into with your entries, which only adds to your charm. Don't stop.
The Great Escaper you were definitely in the running. Your characters are by far my favorite in this contest! If you continue with this plot let me know! I want to know more of these siblings, and how they tie into their world.
Sar-low the way you wrote your piece was so beautiful. I was enchanted by it, you should be proud of your entry. It had the "I open at the close" feel to it.
Comrade, your strength lies in your descriptions. Such beautiful imagery! You are a diamond in the ruff buddy, never stop writing. I will always read it.
If anyone wants any pointers or feedback pm me and I'll be happy to oblige! I am taking a rest from these competitions and Comrade has stepped up to the plate to host (three cheers for him!)! I have loved doing these competitions and will continue to watch over them. 720Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡHlVacneb5L
Well done to all! I don't mean that casually, you have all done so well! Including our newbies!! 720Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ3Y48OZjp8i
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