讀完了木刻的《花開五姊妹》,於是在這邊跟大家分享。224Please respect copyright.PENANAEqqCe4VEO9
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故事中,能讓五姊妹各自都負責一個環節,一起努力救人,我覺得這點很棒。224Please respect copyright.PENANA3CUnVBYpzE
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如同木刻在後記所說,主角在與母親、姊姊之間的互動、情感鋪陳略顯不足,在角色的外貌上也缺乏著墨,讀者其實沒辦法想像他們各自是什麼樣子,這樣其實有點可惜。224Please respect copyright.PENANARRQsLhMjmH
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男主的前世是賢者,這在開頭說過,但是在番外又補了前前世的段落,便顯得有些突然了。倘若在故事中,在該段落前面,安排過男主顯露出社畜知識的橋段作為鋪陳,應該會好很多。224Please respect copyright.PENANAkCNJTr2Xmp
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個人認為,本作的優點在於用簡單的情節,去傳達拯救家人這個純樸又很能讓人體會的情感,要是對此有更多描寫,想必也會更加觸動人心。224Please respect copyright.PENANAsSS7why2Iv
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大概是這個樣子。224Please respect copyright.PENANAU0c8KgK0vy
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因為字數未達三百,就不申請獎勵了。224Please respect copyright.PENANAGhzdAaKBvW
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大家有興趣的話,可以讀讀看。224Please respect copyright.PENANApucgQ4uGOY
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