Okay, after this point I will be posting the 1st revisions from Deviantart here but trying to figure out where to split them up for their next revising/fine tuning. If something does not have a chapter title then that is a continuation from the previously titled chapter. This will be to attempt splitting up the chapters if needed so I can figure out a focus for each one. I am aware there will be errors and those will get fixed during the next revision.
For now I'm going to upload the rest of Book 1 in its 1st revision form to get input on anything that doesn't sound like it works, doesn't seem within the realm of reason or probability, or if something just doesn't flow right. I want this series to flow smoothly and be awesome. I want to convey things fluidly if I can. If there are any questions about a chapter then please ask and I will try to explain.
Thank you very much so enjoy the rest of Book 1 and then later Book 2's 1st revision form and Book 3 which has begun being posted.
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