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筆流暢舒服,看上去與故事匹配,讀得非常舒服。在這個故事塑造這個氛圍裏面,其實都沒有什麼好挑剔的了。526Please respect copyright.PENANA8lVArN0w0A
唯獨有點附加意見就是,既然作者已經非常擅於掌握節奏同寫到好溫馨細膩的感情,建議日後寫愛情小說時,在劇情或者世界觀裏面下點功夫,讓故事看上去「特別」一點。526Please respect copyright.PENANATnMr7xeqcU
畢竟如今現實純愛的故事已經有點不待見,所以要吸引讀者 / 編輯眼球的話,就可能要在其他方面花點功夫哦。加油!8964 copyright protection522PENANArDuqafIbnr 維尼
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唯一可以挑刺就是對於「十年」這點算是較為牽強。如果寫長少少的話,可以是作者想17歲出書但失敗,然後再用十年參賽、投稿,成為一個知名作家,這樣就會扣題扣得好很多了。526Please respect copyright.PENANAhB4vbQZcCE
其實這一篇也可以寫長,變成一部5、6萬的中短篇小說,我覺得也挺有潛質的。8964 copyright protection522PENANAQsJeFmkdbm 維尼
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一起來迎接最後一位參賽者~526Please respect copyright.PENANAQuwgO2xgHu
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很不錯的玄幻作品。其實這種參賽作品,更是限制了一萬字內的比賽,要撰寫玄幻或異世界類的作品是困難的。526Please respect copyright.PENANAVoBrCIFxfg
首先很聰明先用現代及香港作背景,同時以茅山道法這香港人較熟悉的元素,變相不需要花費太多筆墨就能夠寫出玄幻元素。526Please respect copyright.PENANA7EJAUZ9y0g
整體從文筆、劇情、橋段等等實屬不俗。526Please respect copyright.PENANAM2b1CRJJmB
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為了楓成而入寫作坑的人……莫名熱血啊!526Please respect copyright.PENANA1bk1MzNCVU
以有限的字數建構完整的世界觀不容易,我認為作者在這方面是成功的。526Please respect copyright.PENANANmY856fuAT
不過可以再留意內容的剪裁,精減一些與主線無關的敍述,如三位後人的感情線,可使情節更為緊湊。8964 copyright protection522PENANAQVsHZcGyIm 維尼
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優點是世界觀與故事完成度高,打鬥戲精彩。526Please respect copyright.PENANAaXV7w07Nwe
缺點是劇情枝節太多,只是整體瑕不掩瑜,算是海選中其中一篇精品。8964 copyright protection522PENANAHVuHgrN5IN 維尼
以下有幾個建議:526Please respect copyright.PENANArxWwsgXOQH
1. 此等短篇字數有限,切忌得隴望蜀。不要野心太大創造過多角色,在一萬以內的短文之中,人多反而容易手腳亂。526Please respect copyright.PENANAm3QSxY55Ld
2. 對於傳統茅山道術知識的引用需要注意一下,適量拋出會顯得淵博,但過多則會適得其反,有賣弄之感。526Please respect copyright.PENANAdNh3THh1nR
3. 如第一點所言,三名小主角其實性格同存在感都不算突出,比較流於表面,尤其感情戲其實頗嫌累贅。下次設計劇情時要注意一下。8964 copyright protection522PENANAfHPs6pKtm2 維尼
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嗯526Please respect copyright.PENANAAqi52h6bCY
這個作者是我認識的人呢526Please respect copyright.PENANAiorEc10Ixr
見證到他的成長也挺欣慰的8964 copyright protection522PENANAiBH22CaiqB 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection522PENANA85zAHhlNag 維尼
東南老人家模式啟動了8964 copyright protection522PENANAnfC0UtQCgT 維尼
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想當年出現了⋯⋯8964 copyright protection522PENANApqBvMhFgfB 維尼
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東叔,一起來玩⭕️❌吧8964 copyright protection522PENANAuLBCTmpt1b 維尼
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恭喜8964 copyright protection522PENANAYHgkGyWj9G 維尼
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亡魂之筆可以進入候選區囉!8964 copyright protection522PENANAtTmOo5ePST 維尼
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進入候選區的分別是8964 copyright protection522PENANAjSn9ZYq6ep 維尼
儀洛羊526Please respect copyright.PENANAXujmfLYoT5
郁郁如煙消於天526Please respect copyright.PENANAcj3l7rbHHj
涼靜融526Please respect copyright.PENANABdAlvIWNEJ
Blackative526Please respect copyright.PENANAiN8atJlEA7
日勻526Please respect copyright.PENANAc6tDV5tfTf
亡魂之筆526Please respect copyright.PENANAOCzJbbYsYF
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陌情有落8964 copyright protection522PENANAkbogYvTu13 維尼
還有兩位由誠意✊✊打救的參賽者8964 copyright protection522PENANAwnRMeTXal0 維尼
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文楓8964 copyright protection522PENANAuaJfAuHRBy 維尼
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接下來請三位退場526Please respect copyright.PENANAZqtX96xuTc
到自己的休息室給8位候選區的參賽者排邀請順序哦!8964 copyright protection522PENANAoZu93hHFV7 維尼
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你有沒有覺得哪個參賽者進不了候選區,很可惜的呢?8964 copyright protection522PENANAGh1Ak7F4Ju 維尼
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我覺得下一站天后是很可惜的8964 copyright protection522PENANAagXVOKmEuG 維尼
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嗯,就是子鶱的七十•七萬•七十億。8964 copyright protection522PENANAYFucs0CtxY 維尼
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對8964 copyright protection522PENANADrLJK5XcME 維尼
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你也是打滿高分的。8964 copyright protection522PENANAAiXYgvjMfB 維尼
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嗯8964 copyright protection522PENANAs8vrTpsxg3 維尼
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如果當初沒有用到✊✊的機會526Please respect copyright.PENANAjkwNskN10u
你會用來救他嗎?8964 copyright protection522PENANAWoLgBQdZVE 維尼
東南8964 copyright protection522PENANAhKk9IP2tz4 維尼
應該也不會。因為拳拳是直接順序第一名的選項526Please respect copyright.PENANAUTbJS7Xrhc
我覺得作者如果入選的話是紀言會比較符合他/她的風格526Please respect copyright.PENANAysVJ4hi0hz
我雖然能給到意見,但要入隊的話我還是想選一些我自覺能幫助更多的同學8964 copyright protection522PENANAN1B8uYKpOp 維尼
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你有甚麼想跟選你的參賽者說的嗎?8964 copyright protection522PENANAAb0DWqNSgA 維尼
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多謝選擇我。526Please respect copyright.PENANA3QQqeXhvlw
希望我作為導師不會讓你們失望。8964 copyright protection522PENANA8imjYL7kIx 維尼
我能否一個個說?8964 copyright protection522PENANAaomq3kGYJT 維尼
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可以的8964 copyright protection522PENANAyOkjuZeH2E 維尼
東南8964 copyright protection522PENANAiXrhVtOT46 維尼
首先跟日匀 說吧。8964 copyright protection522PENANAwCw8ksR0mC 維尼
其實見到你的文章,我感覺見到一個強化版的「當年自己」。526Please respect copyright.PENANAPRYhSGvuIM
你的文字功力甚至比我當年紮實。劇情弱項也跟我當年類同。526Please respect copyright.PENANA6YLh0B39tf
所以我很希望能幫助你寫武俠,加油!8964 copyright protection522PENANAqEN5NpoD17 維尼
然後到過海巴士的洛羊。526Please respect copyright.PENANApk0hqYBDeQ
很驚訝你那麼高水準的會選擇我,希望我不會讓你失望!8964 copyright protection522PENANAdXAMLbcOnP 維尼
最後到逆時。526Please respect copyright.PENANAHO9dXl795b
嗯 ..... 你的文很對我腦波,所以。。。。多謝!!8964 copyright protection522PENANAqTLDIzwR2v 維尼
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你會先選那些首選你的參賽者嗎?8964 copyright protection522PENANAuTd4en351N 維尼
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其實不會的526Please respect copyright.PENANAh7C0IOkoGs
但碰巧這次三個都極中我8964 copyright protection522PENANAw97mqaXk9F 維尼
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明白。526Please respect copyright.PENANAStptPr1GMQ
那你邀請順序已經想好了嗎?526Please respect copyright.PENANAbiaiNRIARe
有讓你猶豫的部分?8964 copyright protection522PENANALjpzo7k4EJ 維尼
東南8964 copyright protection522PENANAIqPTUrRqsf 維尼
想好了8964 copyright protection522PENANApjnVq4YGx1 維尼
1. #19 過海巴士 儀洛羊526Please respect copyright.PENANAHXpkfNkwxt
2. #20 他的故事 日勻8964 copyright protection522PENANATd8GQjopLg 維尼
其他全棄權讓給另外兩位吧www8964 copyright protection522PENANAKhrfwBm1Vx 維尼
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竟然這樣!526Please respect copyright.PENANAUywFmGPqcf
你就不怕另外兩位跟你搶嗎?526Please respect copyright.PENANAjS28sQCrxl
這樣你最糟可能只有一人進隊哦!8964 copyright protection522PENANApWaw41C4NQ 維尼
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我覺得他們一定不會搶日匀的。526Please respect copyright.PENANA392Y9BARHB
另外洛羊他們雖給到很高分,但我覺得他們有另外適合他們的526Please respect copyright.PENANAYyiM9MToRQ
應該不會跟我搶的wwwww8964 copyright protection522PENANAWKatQS7TC8 維尼
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好的,一起來看看 東南的Flag……526Please respect copyright.PENANA9QeDhp6HHT
www8964 copyright protection522PENANA1UKhu0qRR2 維尼
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wwww526Please respect copyright.PENANAmUOGmFK5dQ
求不要搶526Please respect copyright.PENANAcjB4TL2qGJ
😂8964 copyright protection522PENANAnpkBHutsr0 維尼
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【楓成預備室】8964 copyright protection522PENANAcP09BmiiFZ 維尼
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剛才完成了選擇門的部分8964 copyright protection522PENANAQ3ZLeerB8b 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection522PENANAVX8eeQvMen 維尼
是的526Please respect copyright.PENANAv4YVOIkjPk
真是艱難的一部份(汗8964 copyright protection522PENANAneEb4M9tjF 維尼
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你有感覺哪位參賽者進不了候選區526Please respect copyright.PENANAmRAzYDF4IC
很可惜的嗎?8964 copyright protection522PENANAuu7AmO136d 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection522PENANAR5xmyZ9h48 維尼
嗯…526Please respect copyright.PENANAZnfE58Fyc4
真要說的話526Please respect copyright.PENANA58TkngyHv6
子鶱的七十•七萬•七十億是不錯的作品526Please respect copyright.PENANAzJ27QuEnXz
只可惜名額有限8964 copyright protection522PENANA9pheSwJKH8 維尼
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那如果✊✊現在還可以用,你會用來救他嗎?8964 copyright protection522PENANADRwPTjsqVO 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection522PENANAMiAFv6ch2v 維尼
也不會,哈哈526Please respect copyright.PENANAB7ieyWJk8L
因為入選剩下來的選手也很出色8964 copyright protection522PENANAT28fJ8ZvIB 維尼
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是的。526Please respect copyright.PENANATsHuA9RUeX
想問一下526Please respect copyright.PENANAxkkRqBvTPy
日勻的作品——他的故事8964 copyright protection522PENANAoac789tNiQ 維尼
你好像是給他打滿高分的,526Please respect copyright.PENANAS7UDzwdOTK
但你好似沒有給他舉圈的吧?8964 copyright protection522PENANAwZpYMoWCdG 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection522PENANA6THhRFgOFe 維尼
是的哈哈,大概是圓圈太有限了(眼神死8964 copyright protection522PENANAnDFQB6qXUe 維尼
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如果好像文楓落得三叉的下場,你會像紀言那樣出拳嗎?8964 copyright protection522PENANAQ8YyJEALyq 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection522PENANAynpm0ukyfO 維尼
這個,大概南師父不會給叉哈哈,所以我很放心526Please respect copyright.PENANAJUdKi2Tjjh
所以應該也不會8964 copyright protection522PENANAI2WeiE0n0H 維尼
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你就算好了他們想法是不是ww8964 copyright protection522PENANAuM5kieKQPm 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection522PENANAUtdIdkEfr3 維尼
沒錯!526Please respect copyright.PENANAlezx0NwAir
你看洗版南師父就知道526Please respect copyright.PENANA9uAO7swxhE
古風武俠,他不會放過!8964 copyright protection522PENANAUPGXdl1tvX 維尼
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那說回來,8位候選區的選手們,你是會怎麼給他們排邀請優先序呢?526Please respect copyright.PENANA8Cc3S5vA4k
因為你不像另外兩位,已經定了第一名邀請的參賽者526Please respect copyright.PENANAW5R0nfJ8Xp
你覺得是比較好、自在?526Please respect copyright.PENANAaKo2eYqcBP
還是比較擔心被搶人呢?8964 copyright protection522PENANAvpS8JzdoG3 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection522PENANAmuY9upjJSs 維尼
也不會特別怕啦哈哈8964 copyright protection522PENANAvrufx33Ehh 維尼
526Please respect copyright.PENANA5exrLmg9sv
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【紀言預備室】8964 copyright protection522PENANAE2ZX1hOaIg 維尼
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剛完成了選擇門的部分526Please respect copyright.PENANA0ZhZ4MKfZR
有甚麼感想的嗎?8964 copyright protection522PENANADdAOJYgGjm 維尼
紀言8964 copyright protection522PENANA2FKDMgO8pL 維尼
真的讓人緊張呢526Please respect copyright.PENANAYcyfJKkTgO
其實很多參賽者的實力相差真的不遠526Please respect copyright.PENANAPbl8ShuQDs
在抉擇時真的讓人加倍為難8964 copyright protection522PENANA2idCBX5HJY 維尼
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有沒有覺得可惜的參賽者?竟然進不了候選區這樣?8964 copyright protection522PENANAWXnZMaS9Ht 維尼
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其實此去拾年我覺得是寫得不錯的526Please respect copyright.PENANAaEKHzoj7h9
可是類似的作品有點多526Please respect copyright.PENANAYPCN2G8pRy
真的很可惜8964 copyright protection522PENANAPOoLrgU1CA 維尼
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這是你當時沒有給出✊的原因嗎?8964 copyright protection522PENANAmWD0PCDAt4 維尼
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此去拾年和十年陽光、董小姐都被我歸到同一類中526Please respect copyright.PENANAeK658tbXiG
嘛,他也寫得很好,但另外兩篇真的是更好8964 copyright protection522PENANAXeKVnFabfA 維尼
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明白。526Please respect copyright.PENANAFW1NrN4ZXA
那現在進入了給候選區參賽者排邀請順序的環節526Please respect copyright.PENANA1avh0oXC23
你有甚麼想法嗎?8964 copyright protection522PENANAioHMz9YJpw 維尼
紀言8964 copyright protection522PENANAPzQEqnY0k9 維尼
說實在的526Please respect copyright.PENANAgnQf80h15V
我超級糾結526Please respect copyright.PENANAs0rknY43Ry
尤其是(竟然)有那麼多參賽者選我,壓力倍增呢8964 copyright protection522PENANAJrZCvLoTri 維尼
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有想好要根據甚麼去排的?8964 copyright protection522PENANAMsnje95v8i 維尼
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本來是要跟分數排的,可是後來考慮到題材的問題,又再排了一次526Please respect copyright.PENANAdvDi5SLBie
如上所說,十年陽光和董小姐是在最高分之列526Please respect copyright.PENANAWIXUaCgTJV
可是他們的題材有點類近526Please respect copyright.PENANA6IxJswqU4V
我想讓我的學員們能接觸多一點不同的類型,這樣聊起來才更有趣526Please respect copyright.PENANAiAxPMI5760
所以嘛,即使二人都是最高分,我還是只會選一個8964 copyright protection522PENANAi6qHS4DO2K 維尼
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說回來,你是參賽者們的最搶手首選導師,就最多人選你8964 copyright protection522PENANAsJEOWjRnzK 維尼
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當初沒想過這麼多人選我的哈哈526Please respect copyright.PENANADIZY1GZ60s
畢竟楓成是penana人氣王526Please respect copyright.PENANA53Bfzoxmq6
東南也筆耕了十多年526Please respect copyright.PENANA5TICikxonF
說到資歷和寫作的字數,可能我是最少的呢哈哈526Please respect copyright.PENANASWO6AYXs3l
不過也感謝大家的愛戴8964 copyright protection522PENANALsIAmeeXp3 維尼
我先說我的首選好了526Please respect copyright.PENANAU9vntpjmuq
(是甚麼呢???????)(自帶效果!)8964 copyright protection522PENANA3xlHCoZ2p2 維尼
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不是你說要早點睡的嗎!www8964 copyright protection522PENANAiXNjBdlIUR 維尼
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好了喇526Please respect copyright.PENANAC5Roy0jeB6
第一位是十年陽光喇526Please respect copyright.PENANAqfwVJv92AB
我要分享一下我的心路歷程XPXP8964 copyright protection522PENANAB0zGbE2pmZ 維尼
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可以的~8964 copyright protection522PENANAlAFVe0AYT3 維尼
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第二位就是成功獲得我一拳的獵巫!526Please respect copyright.PENANAYi55ztdZvo
第三位其實糾結了超~~~~~~~~~~~久526Please respect copyright.PENANAwOqFgfXL19
是在輪候者和天使的惡作劇之間掙扎了好久8964 copyright protection522PENANACuQzbmdMrQ 維尼
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但輪候者的Blackative 很厲害,寫了兩篇不一樣的作品~8964 copyright protection522PENANAyIt1QMaehH 維尼
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輪候者是非常成熟的作品,風格也已經定形了526Please respect copyright.PENANANOExcgcIs0
時限內能寫兩篇也真的很厲害526Please respect copyright.PENANA94vekE3LG2
不過時間小偷的話我就稍嫌有點負面了526Please respect copyright.PENANAYOzSiNBgoc
寫作作為興趣,應該是先令自己開心,然後再看看其他的可能的526Please respect copyright.PENANAR1xBvPh4mT
至於天使的惡作劇,雖然分數上不及輪候者,但是他的文風很對我的腦波,我也覺得他有潛力526Please respect copyright.PENANALqmoMp1DTY
所以第三位一直在他們之間糾結8964 copyright protection522PENANAwb0LnwGULk 維尼
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最後,你的選擇是……8964 copyright protection522PENANA4261M1341L 維尼
紀言8964 copyright protection522PENANAUQHPnVSbHj 維尼
就是⋯⋯526Please respect copyright.PENANAKbjsqaqOMg
天使的惡作劇!526Please respect copyright.PENANAAO3XIZBzIT
我希望Blackative能被其他導師收入戰隊526Please respect copyright.PENANA1MDzd1da3y
他的實力是值得的526Please respect copyright.PENANAeA46seY6jr
奈何只有三個位置526Please respect copyright.PENANAfnHOIcWGpo
(嘛,規則也是我們三人定的,也沒辦法喇)8964 copyright protection522PENANA6ZlJHYAfz3 維尼
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好了……我們就先聽紀言的頭三順序,不然要天亮了8964 copyright protection522PENANAXO19QhPJcs 維尼
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嘮嘮叨叨了一大堆呢哈哈8964 copyright protection522PENANA74FDVeBqKZ 維尼
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謝謝紀言😂8964 copyright protection522PENANAj9PIEYbg0b 維尼
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(邀請順序收集中……)8964 copyright protection522PENANAODrbAqbzTj 維尼
(節目組整理中……)8964 copyright protection522PENANAHI7q1KV4SN 維尼
開始送出組隊邀請!8964 copyright protection522PENANAg7cy3WWggj 維尼
526Please respect copyright.PENANAv6DR4wwrYE
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【參賽者預備室】8964 copyright protection522PENANA5MbeRO05hr 維尼
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有些參賽者和導師們是兩情相悅的,526Please respect copyright.PENANACefnAMYJhW
最終修成正果,可喜可賀!8964 copyright protection522PENANAMygeP3jX99 維尼
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恭喜你,成功加入東南/ 紀言 / 楓成戰隊!8964 copyright protection522PENANA2xeTjfRH5n 維尼
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:O 我以為係21號先有結果😂 btw thx8964 copyright protection522PENANAwGAcRMzBi1 維尼
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哇!真架?🥰8964 copyright protection522PENANAN0mmxywnqq 維尼
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收到了,感謝你這麼晚了還要通知我們這群選手8964 copyright protection522PENANAKMDneHjCAe 維尼
參賽者D8964 copyright protection522PENANAfBLHf123Ku 維尼
感激涕零!🥺🥺8964 copyright protection522PENANAVGrp7TdUu9 維尼
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我入圍了?8964 copyright protection522PENANA2E7E3f0QMD 維尼
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多謝你8964 copyright protection522PENANA5QrKqTxzVo 維尼
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終於等到消息😭😭8964 copyright protection522PENANAwvBfK1cczX 維尼
526Please respect copyright.PENANA6P95qh1aR3
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而有些參賽者就要陷入天人交戰的選擇!526Please respect copyright.PENANAmTpz2pv5Fy
面對非首選導師的邀請,是要接受,還是……8964 copyright protection522PENANAdTQBUrD8tS 維尼
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導師A誠邀你進入他的戰隊,請問你願意接受嗎?526Please respect copyright.PENANAcfxxV5E2aE
提提你,你首選係導師B8964 copyright protection522PENANAWtIO20mYyz 維尼
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雖然冇被導師B選中有啲可惜,但我其實唔介意被分到邊一隊(搔頭8964 copyright protection522PENANAGgBnKaWZWa 維尼
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但導師B有冇講咩?8964 copyright protection522PENANA9UV7eYbZn1 維尼
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或者我解釋下先,個情況係:526Please respect copyright.PENANAe69JQNcrTs
導師A對你嘅邀請順序高過導師B。526Please respect copyright.PENANAcKhZ6aV569
如果你拒絕咗,有可能會收到導師B嘅邀請,526Please respect copyright.PENANAAwWZhfrO3J
但前提係:當時導師B戰隊未滿人。526Please respect copyright.PENANAtZD8sFtJcw
如果導師B戰隊已經滿人,但你又拒絕咗導師A,526Please respect copyright.PENANAP7AEJ9YRCg
你就只可以參與復活賽,睇下仲有冇機會入導師B戰隊。8964 copyright protection522PENANAXFmdOPvajC 維尼
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咁複雜既ODO?!526Please respect copyright.PENANA3PmmQmNabC
喊出嚟,都好賭博喎(つД`)8964 copyright protection522PENANA1n9C3UEgtR 維尼
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依個我最遲可以幾時答你?8964 copyright protection522PENANAUK0viwd8xc 維尼
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可能……盡快?8964 copyright protection522PENANAc7KTYMCXfc 維尼
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我今晚墊高枕頭諗諗,聽日覆你唔好意思(つД`)8964 copyright protection522PENANAAfawKDztTZ 維尼
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咁就加入導師A嘅戰隊526Please respect copyright.PENANAm38TqsTB9R
我估,咁姐係佢幾欣賞我526Please respect copyright.PENANA58gELvZX0h
掛8964 copyright protection522PENANATubv5r4dLc 維尼
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我決定好了(超快526Please respect copyright.PENANAap9yl2wLiw
我都係入導師A隊526Please respect copyright.PENANA9DyRJqJuxb
唔太敢賭(つД`)8964 copyright protection522PENANAMXh0SkwQVR 維尼
526Please respect copyright.PENANAO1dd2bvASA
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【鏡頭關上後】8964 copyright protection522PENANAgOeErIxSci 維尼
東南8964 copyright protection522PENANAf3VwK2qY8l 維尼
我有少少寄語卑Blackative,我不如Pm你?8964 copyright protection522PENANAzmwxXJTz5o 維尼
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好8964 copyright protection522PENANA6HFuuNIgIA 維尼
東南8964 copyright protection522PENANAvo8HvEUU5c 維尼
首先要講一句好遺憾你入唔到戰隊賽。526Please respect copyright.PENANAA1wLIljJ7T
你兩篇文喺我眼中都係本次比賽裏面的精品,但我選擇戰隊成員時,實力雖然係其中一個考慮因素,但另外更多係會考慮成員風格同自己夾唔夾,同埋每位成員的潛力等等因素。526Please respect copyright.PENANAMcKFOLLrZQ
你卑我感覺係一個已經相當成熟,好有自己一套嘅作者,無論係時間小偷定係豬果篇我覺得都發揮得唔錯,我讀時都頗有眼前一亮的感覺。526Please respect copyright.PENANAJcmZZvljAc
但奈何戰隊賽名額有限,我揀的三位亦係我認為最適合我戰隊的成員,所以就只能忍痛無向你拋出橄欖枝,我相信其餘兩位導師應該都同我一樣,對你落選係感到遺憾的。526Please respect copyright.PENANA1nbCApxzpg
我希望你唔好因為呢個結果就感到氣餒,希望你能夠堅持同繼續寫落去。如果你參加復活賽的話,我亦會非常期待你復活賽的表現,加油!8964 copyright protection522PENANAqOWzkIM4qH 維尼
【海選選秀環節】完!8964 copyright protection522PENANApHeZZVtLSX 維尼
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【第二階段:戰隊/復活賽】「太歲兵團 X 萌動學生小說集2021」寫作營8964 copyright protection522PENANAhcuXCrohJC 維尼
之後還會有很多寫作分享跟幕後花絮讓你看,不要錯過囉!8964 copyright protection522PENANAWOjY4jOIOB 維尼
參賽者們,8964 copyright protection522PENANAt2UTJHnaZS 維尼
第二階段還有三十二天就要結束了!8964 copyright protection522PENANAUFaKPWN2PC 維尼
注意時間哦!8964 copyright protection522PENANAK2nAvvCNEM 維尼
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