首先,在此說聲感謝。
【第6期創作挑戰】歷時1年才將其完成評比。
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原先應該在今年初完成最終結語。
但在這期間,我遇到了職場上必須離開台灣本島一段很長的時間。
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身邊除了沒有電腦用,又外加大寶處於一歲難照顧的時期,同時間又懷了二寶。
生活的考驗不斷地消彌我對於創作的熱誠,與占據了大多數的空閒。
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我必須說。
很遺憾的有些人在一年後已經離開了蕉園。
他(她)們沒能等待到這一次的落幕。
也很可惜。
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最後,我將再次感謝你們願意耐心等待這場落幕儀式。
-----Lonely Fish 2024.11.06
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恭喜第六期的創作挑戰榮獲2023創作挑戰第二名的殊榮
這次的費時長達一年的時間來完成評比。
這裡我可以大膽的跟各位報告,每一篇作品少說都讀過兩次以上,並且全部都留下語評。
240篇文筆不一的文章,我必須老實說「讀起來,真的燒腦的一蹋糊塗。」
但創作理念熱誠還在,這些都不是問題。
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以上廢話結束。
接著,我們準備公布這次的成績,並在後面留下一點這個創作挑戰的心得。
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由於篇幅眾多。(小說類190篇,新詩類44篇,其他6篇。)
我採取小說正取前20篇,以我個人主觀挑選在故事劇情、用字、人物刻劃都能拿上檯面。
並且讓人願意反覆閱讀的好作品。
我會「盡量」挑選字數符合在1500字的作品。
另外,在新詩的部分,由於主題應當以新詩作為框架。
但考量到部分樂府詩、古詩這類的作品,故此一併用單純「詩」的角度去作為出發點,進行評選。
另外,額外兩個獨力拉出來的獎項,分別是【最佳電腦繪畫獎】及【最佳創作金曲獎】,後續會多作說明。
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小說類
【1】凶讀 $5000
▶#20 #21 夏日湖畔(上+下) #104 夏日湖畔(番外)香氣
▶已連續三篇故事銜接的方式,引領讀者深入,不管在用字上,人物刻劃都非常的好。
▶語評
「剪不斷,理還亂,是離愁。別是一般滋味在心頭。」李煜一句思念妻子的思緒,在第一章的開局,讓人無限醞釀著,那多麼曾經的美好。362Please respect copyright.PENANA5zc9bIO7Ke
接續則是父親與孩兒間,多年來已未溫存的親情。
畫面是那麼地美不勝收---362Please respect copyright.PENANAIyvtgYEiB9
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又一刻,轉折接踵而來。362Please respect copyright.PENANA7aDrDlYcae
一陣猛咳,替換的是埋下了這段故事另一處伏筆。362Please respect copyright.PENANANW9JgOgo8t
一個故事之內容精采萬分,之所以讓人看了血脈噴張,捨不得放下,就是因為其中的不平凡。362Please respect copyright.PENANAFYoexidmDH
而這篇在下章就是如此。362Please respect copyright.PENANASRslpVfdpV
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林佑堂的變故,是突來的喪屍系列。362Please respect copyright.PENANAvvuLTKaOh9
估計讀者心到此處,仍處在數度混亂之中,這便也是作者凶讀所達成的目的。362Please respect copyright.PENANAL6SsEcNA8F
耐人尋味的親情,卻轉折為末日的延續,更讓人有敲碗再看下去續篇的打算。362Please respect copyright.PENANAPC6TKER6gq
而在那新聞快訊後,簡潔地收尾結束,更把這篇有力的畫下句點。362Please respect copyright.PENANAmorJIaHw0N
是否疫情將緩和停滯,這我們無從得知。362Please respect copyright.PENANANCm9hSln64
但唯一明白的卻是,那份恐懼感已然存於你內心深處,餘音繞梁三日不絕。362Please respect copyright.PENANAv8Wv1RcbIt
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在104章的番外篇延續了,讀者再次想要的畫面,凶讀更是樂善好施地將畫面全數帶給讀者,簡直令人幸福得太過不要。362Please respect copyright.PENANAgx7lUPmrfK
「我知道你們還想看對吧?那我就接續再寫下去。」那份激昂感,卻給了我們內心違和的感動。362Please respect copyright.PENANAWFOZgDKvfK
還記得去年在Netflix看過殭屍校園,雖故事的起點不同,卻有類似的風格,而在中部開始傳染開來的病毒,又是否會使政府展開鎖國政策呢?362Please respect copyright.PENANAkcefIzZR23
這又將會是另外的話題,我們便不多做討論。
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眼下,有的只剩讀者的幻想空間。
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【2】 Devor 白棘 $4000
▶#123 終末的煙火 #138 終末的海洋 #147 終末的冰箱
▶這三篇故事,可以分開閱讀獨立的章節,也可以連貫再一起成為一篇長篇。
▶語評
非常罕見的倒述寫法。362Please respect copyright.PENANAsT3HJwo184
在第三篇中我們才知道歐林362Please respect copyright.PENANACB4YrnN2FT
這故是關鍵的人物362Please respect copyright.PENANAEpDyEiEMKv
自此才明白,原來他不僅僅是想要復活362Please respect copyright.PENANASOiDaBgtxX
最強吸血鬼兼任戀人的芙蕾兒並且同時想延續那個諾言362Please respect copyright.PENANAV7tRK1VVhz
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「我們的孩子」362Please respect copyright.PENANAkG3Bw5WTKd
這連續性的故事寫法特殊、故事完整362Please respect copyright.PENANAq74GQYK20z
實為本次【第六期創挑】中非常少見的用詞精簡,劇情完整的好文。362Please respect copyright.PENANAFH91OaXkVw
而相信自芙蕾兒離開前往新的星球後362Please respect copyright.PENANAindbWQrB7B
也肯定還會有新的故事起點362Please respect copyright.PENANAtkyBxfoWJw
然而天下無不散的宴席362Please respect copyright.PENANA1wiO0XcVgx
我們本次故事便到此結束362Please respect copyright.PENANA4rAgM3COd9
希望下次還能再次相遇
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【3】東加豆 $3000
▶#57 在雅典46度的邂逅
▶在眾多篇幅中,脫穎而出的是,故事僅只是讀過一次,卻能留下一種強烈的遺憾感,即便是第一次語評後,過了一年仍舊記得這篇故事。
▶語評
從引頸期盼到衝動遠行再到心灰意冷,全都只在一念轉瞬之間。362Please respect copyright.PENANAbzrrPbxdqd
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時而濕冷刺骨,時而溫暖潤人。只有那若隱若現的鹽澀味。翻越了半個地球曲面的海風,再次又為女孩捎來了,希臘赤道的浪漫。362Please respect copyright.PENANAEYeb1li8LE
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然而,言語中就是躲藏不了的宿命。爭執,同時是不可避免的毒藥。362Please respect copyright.PENANAbJc651sMiS
雖然亞歷山大沉默寡言,卻又可能內心同樣掀起幾絲驚滔駭浪,過猶那地中海的濱海陸風。362Please respect copyright.PENANAbdROsmodW0
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十日的短暫浪漫,在最後無言的結局中就畫下了浪漫的破碎。璇姑娘,那女孩。在22歲的希臘,不帶走任何一片雲彩。
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【4】嚮往國度 $2000
▶#122 回不去的夏天
▶語評
或許,女孩在男孩的心目中,尚未離開世間,只是去了一趟旅行。362Please respect copyright.PENANAduhcKVbT38
然而,她早已成為了徘徊在兩人過去記憶的地縛靈,只是男孩至今仍未知情。362Please respect copyright.PENANAD8NPr23PQR
從首段讓讀者猜測,或許是與女孩的某項約定,卻未料想竟是場人鬼情未了。362Please respect copyright.PENANAT18uuRtvIB
直當夏季,在眾人眼底,我仍舊是個念舊的傻瓜。362Please respect copyright.PENANAhxrpI1i12k
----我也會赴約前往只有我倆的地方。362Please respect copyright.PENANAs876b1GpxE
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我嘗試幻想,如果女孩不是同學,而是男孩的親妹妹呢?362Please respect copyright.PENANANAMrxJKg2v
會不會是父母親對他倆默許的戀兄情節呢?362Please respect copyright.PENANADqjLauXuRW
最後的一栗核桃果,放進的並非只是男孩的口袋,反而是讀者的腦海深處的下丘帶,是令人抑鬱不住的交感情緒。362Please respect copyright.PENANAtoori3KfFV
房內的擺設習慣仍舊未變,然而變得是男孩儼然未知心態變化。362Please respect copyright.PENANANXppjN2eIG
直當年齡越大,約定束縛卻也越輕。只是他仍未發現而已。362Please respect copyright.PENANAFtwMEVnuhj
「我還會再來此地嗎?」內心的他,或許有一天終會發現。362Please respect copyright.PENANAc6SxwA7NN5
而從「想見你。」,直至餘生再也不見,那又會是怎麼樣子的感概呢?362Please respect copyright.PENANA1vqxeWXX2m
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「體貼不該在離別,你會讓該死心的的人還有留戀。」而妳最後的溫柔,也讓那個總是跌跌撞撞的男孩,終究打破了直男的心房,如此的明示,最終他也肯定發現了這些蛛絲馬跡了吧。362Please respect copyright.PENANA97MDqSiskL
我,還會再來嗎?每年盛夏,妳還會再此處嗎?362Please respect copyright.PENANAZekYTLLese
陡然間,男孩的一抹淚痕伴隨著成長悄然滑下。
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男孩離開後山後,她對著空無一人無助地嘶喊著:「你,明年別再來了。」362Please respect copyright.PENANAKXT49pkkR5
儘管未來,女孩不知道是否成為了男孩心中最熟悉的陌生人。但那奈河橋上,望穿著黃泉;凝視著他仍未走完人生的女孩,直至走過彼岸花叢,喝完了孟婆湯,她仍相信來生幾世,倆人肯定還能再相見。
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【5】大三明治 $2000
▶#86 拉普拉斯的白兔
▶語評
一個無限循環的惡夢(應該算是)362Please respect copyright.PENANAUUz4Ukn4On
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原先還在思索拉普拉斯的兔子的我,直到看完了故事才知道,我根本無需糾結這個地方。362Please respect copyright.PENANAllTCUOCXBc
因為故事已經告訴我了。
文章開篇以學長為起點。362Please respect copyright.PENANAMRZyOrdNhg
而故事線轉回到了從前。362Please respect copyright.PENANA9mrAavCoXR
自己也成了那個月曦口中的學長,令人感覺到不自覺的寒顫,而這份帶入感的恐懼,正是結尾伏筆所醞釀而出的感覺。
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【6】九指三爺 $1500
▶#23 爸爸,還要去哪裡玩?
▶語評
第一段尚未讀完,一道與父親訣別的感傷便先湧上心頭。362Please respect copyright.PENANAHCThRc0Cfb
父親未竟的誓言,是兩人心中永遠的隔閡。362Please respect copyright.PENANAzC7Qk1vUzK
為何情感總道別離時才會讓人醞釀開來?362Please respect copyright.PENANA7mc9zgpWCe
又為何說別讓遺憾留下,卻滿地皆為遺憾?362Please respect copyright.PENANAs4lYscS4do
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告別式中,可以想見的到,父親再娶的家庭該是與自己有著違和的場面;畢竟,自己本已就不屬於另個家庭的一份子。362Please respect copyright.PENANAyvjd0NtN5P
然而,雙方彼此嘗試性的接納,早已打破很多舊時代時候的情緒。362Please respect copyright.PENANAbAOddPZWd3
這點相信生活上只要遭遇過這種際遇的人,心底怕是比起你、我都更加了解。362Please respect copyright.PENANAjGrztq1Hcc
由愛轉恨、恨轉怨,再到冷淡。362Please respect copyright.PENANAoz8sRcy7ZH
這才是常態。
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父親厚繭的雙手,在威利心中是永成長時永遠的心魔。362Please respect copyright.PENANAYDPPhzvla8
直到最後一刻,得知了父親原是愛著自己的時候,淚水又該如何能止住潸落。362Please respect copyright.PENANACQ9B0XkMSa
一代親情,未竟的諾言,終究還是謊言。362Please respect copyright.PENANAfKzP7tnTCO
即便,在告別式中聽到了這些真實話語,可父親仍舊一次都回來見過自己一面,又何如?362Please respect copyright.PENANAKOQfV2m2Wx
一句「父親,接著去哪玩......?」沉重般的自喃,更多的卻是解放開對自己的束縛,並非是對父親救贖。
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告別式後,這些人或許餘生不見。362Please respect copyright.PENANAa43CEgOaDp
然而,此等心情又豈是說忘就忘。362Please respect copyright.PENANAuPoVnrqbmt
原來,痛便是忘了怎麼把過去給忘掉。
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這個盛夏,剩下遺憾。
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【7】思凡 $1500
▶#94 贈我予年
▶語評
故事的結尾是有著強烈的後勁的。362Please respect copyright.PENANAfUOYAxT3dY
整篇閱讀後,在開頭以宋予年在百忙之中,突然發覺了「她」的名字,突然之間再次走入了自己的人生。362Please respect copyright.PENANALICsSZN1yi
至此,幾年前分別以後。362Please respect copyright.PENANADZv8RRerxh
情感又悄悄地、毫無預警的映入了生命之中。362Please respect copyright.PENANAJBtXp25h8l
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「贈我,予年。」或許標題應當可以分開兩字來讀。362Please respect copyright.PENANAIsh7bm6666
文中沒有提及到女孩當初為何離開了,然而,接續著故事推敲,讓我們得知。362Please respect copyright.PENANAZXG6F2D5SN
也是是疾病纏身。362Please respect copyright.PENANADUVj2K98ER
也迫不得已,離開了他。362Please respect copyright.PENANAPiduIYRUuE
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贈我,是一個約定。362Please respect copyright.PENANAF1OpSdpvSH
一個約定券的約定。 362Please respect copyright.PENANAgUV2T5CBrK
而再見之時,人事已非。362Please respect copyright.PENANA50bfO7tz99
那個我已經不再是原本的那個我,但你還會深愛著我嗎?362Please respect copyright.PENANAeV7C8RvcAC
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此刻,盛夏煙花燦爛,卻不如妳。362Please respect copyright.PENANAvo7inK5HCp
或許,再見不遠。 362Please respect copyright.PENANAXQPSVkAW29
讓就那緣起三生起,三生滅吧。
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【8】青蒼 Cyanblue $1500
▶#47 青夏,十七歲
▶語評
如同青澀地稚嫩十八未滿。那愛戀都如此單純與小心翼翼。
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女方刻意放緩的進度向前,歷經長達三年感情滋養,在學年畢業的最後一刻,差點翻船的心情更是令人跟隨帶入那份苦澀。362Please respect copyright.PENANAyzlGbnSA9A
就像青春微酸甜那般。362Please respect copyright.PENANAyavTIzo9IM
忌妒、單戀,都是青春代表物。362Please respect copyright.PENANANC684sETuL
林夏芮不按照牌理出牌的外向性格,羅青澤在最後眼淚落下那刻才敲響了內心的鐘鳴,迴盪在內心心頭。362Please respect copyright.PENANA5IcaqZga6V
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「原來這就是喜歡的心思。」我們不能怪男生呆如愚木,畢竟又有多少人能在高中時期對於未來、對於愛情掌握的滿分修行呢?362Please respect copyright.PENANAOGeMdFVwn0
夏天的故事,炙熱卻又充滿了愛戀的渲染。比擬冬日,我們更加容易觸動是主動的熱情。362Please respect copyright.PENANAw2GA3DhRzS
劉子傑的主動,或許在我們眼底,更像是跳樑小丑那般故作醜態。362Please respect copyright.PENANAVafTQlrGhk
但就現實面來說,如果今天劉子傑與羅青澤兩人都具備同等的帥氣,同等的條件,那麼主動宣示的那方勝率還是會更高。362Please respect copyright.PENANAoMkHKvZVqd
或許,歷經過這次的告白失敗,在未來能成為他愛情的一個學分也猶未可知。362Please respect copyright.PENANA9ig3AkGD5y
反而寫成了另一個故事的主角。362Please respect copyright.PENANA1JBXD912Z7
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「人間的確荒謬,可我們還是能在這個人間拾溫柔。」故事曖昧的兩小無猜終成一對眷侶,而畢業後、就業後,又是否能續緣,我們無法猜測最後結局。362Please respect copyright.PENANAzninCdEg9b
心動往往只是一剎那,喜歡卻是一輩子的記憶。362Please respect copyright.PENANA2z49G2gEHD
如果有一天,我們也面臨那份剎那的怦然心動,你/妳又是否敢勇於這份悸動,邁向這份回應呢?362Please respect copyright.PENANAl7MbNceThN
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夏天,依舊是夏天。但不一樣是我們的內心。
362Please respect copyright.PENANAKyl7iKybyS
【9】墨云 $1500
▶#28 盛夏與魔女
▶語評
這是我見過最鮮蝦的奇幻劇情了。362Please respect copyright.PENANAlC0HajpNiL
尤其這男人,絕對是個狠人,全部的純情只為了鋪敘結尾的那慾望。
362Please respect copyright.PENANAOOdcSY1bv3
開門見山的斗大魔女標題,早已告訴了這不能用平常的校園看待故事。362Please respect copyright.PENANA9fpCNYNhSN
而更為新奇的是簡單的一個小手段就處理好了,蟬靈的糾結,這同時打破了我對魔女的刻板印象。362Please respect copyright.PENANAwbdZcMfCoh
魔女的天然呆更是突如其來一筆。362Please respect copyright.PENANAStSmZwNtpK
362Please respect copyright.PENANAkvrCiIgGgo
最後,故事的結尾再次迎來一次,天外飛來兩筆的性慾交易,這確實打破了讀者對於故事原先的美好幻想。362Please respect copyright.PENANAKVv0JsIkY4
只得獲得一次白眼與冰冷感。
362Please respect copyright.PENANABwjfxCRRfR
【10】罪夜 $1500
▶#169 戀愛炸彈
▶語評
藉由肉體爆炸的引爆點劃開了對於戀愛的追求,是那樣獨特卻又邪門。362Please respect copyright.PENANA6wAchc3nCq
362Please respect copyright.PENANAiAvDBAvpEV
百鬼夜行獨見妳。千里迷離卻是妳。362Please respect copyright.PENANA2tTEIV4yYs
我喜愛著,這般怪異卻令人心動的瞬間。362Please respect copyright.PENANAKbXLg1cOin
因那悸動。362Please respect copyright.PENANAvhFs8RNsJX
往往竟是那瞬間。
362Please respect copyright.PENANATrhzuIWxO9
即便長大後再交往的女排球隊長,仍舊不行。362Please respect copyright.PENANAJvnjn61CyT
式風透過了那次的爆炸,早已在尋響內心埋下了一顆揮之不去的種子。362Please respect copyright.PENANAz1aiEQx9mZ
真愛,不僅是人與人之間的感情,更是當你真心喜愛某事、某物,而願意竭盡心力的付出,使他變得更好、更幸福。362Please respect copyright.PENANAOggjfFhB5I
那麼讓自己爆炸,也算是一種真愛嗎?362Please respect copyright.PENANARee8wNphaL
362Please respect copyright.PENANA2m8v2DRrC7
語畢,尋響的爆炸是否讓兩人在另一個百鬼的世界相守相繫,這個猶未可知。362Please respect copyright.PENANA8efRYV0ZjR
但至少可以確定的是,他卻早已觸動了內心最深處的那個戀愛因子了。362Please respect copyright.PENANAxrgTdmY0Qo
「我感到心滿意足。」然而他滿意的就是真的是自己也喜愛著對方,又抑或是對方仍舊七年來愛著自己呢?
362Please respect copyright.PENANAuctdThOHZj
【11】 舉一千從 $1000
▶#182 〈澐寨舞〉
▶語評(詳留言)
362Please respect copyright.PENANAXCT5cyQBn5
【12】 莫軒 $1000
▶#239 末世終結之後,我在破曉的晨曦窺見夏日的生機,但故人不再
▶語評(詳留言)
362Please respect copyright.PENANAJbMENnP7UM
【13】 逆流而上 $1000
▶#185+189+192 蘇拉與山竹
▶語評(詳留言)
362Please respect copyright.PENANAcLkg0ItdQI
【14】指尖之間 $1000
▶#119 回憶剩夏,不增減的約定
▶語評(詳留言)
362Please respect copyright.PENANASK2tSuq6ua
【15】Mag Kan $1000
▶#231 那年盛夏,我們沒有約定
▶語評(詳留言)
362Please respect copyright.PENANAd7h27DRz9G
【16】沙發王的故事 $1000
▶#24 我們約定好了喔?
▶語評(詳留言)
362Please respect copyright.PENANAdbpBejWB0y
【17】八十公里路 $1000
▶#10 我的心裡,還有夏天嗎
▶語評(詳留言)
362Please respect copyright.PENANAd6jhMcEvoG
【18】 不寫文的紜啊 $1000
▶#43 《失約》
▶語評(詳留言)
362Please respect copyright.PENANAroi1XvGkhT
【19】 夜臨 $1000
▶#49 天使大人的玻璃傘
▶語評(詳留言)
362Please respect copyright.PENANAdapyf60Zxp
【20】笑耶 $1000
▶#214+216+218 故地重遊(上+中+下)
▶語評(詳留言)
362Please respect copyright.PENANAJqhM1s1Hfc
【佳作1】莫軒 $500
▶#77 我如何把你比作夏天?
【佳作2】But $500
▶#150 夏天!當然是暑假到處玩啦
【佳作3】供過佛的多多綠 $500
▶#67 那年盛夏
【佳作4】旭音愁渺 $500
▶#198 一起做餅乾
【佳作5】癲客道人 $500
▶#136 日間顯影
362Please respect copyright.PENANAgBMEpqFMTJ
【複評未上榜】
▶#6 盛夏之夢 ▶#50 滿天星 ▶#146 夏戀 ▶#238 夏雨滂沱
362Please respect copyright.PENANALujA9iLV5E
新詩類
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【1】西帆 $4000
▶#203 夏•冬眠
▶語評
本作於擬人、擬物手法上十分精巧362Please respect copyright.PENANASHtcx5bX9S
重複運用卻又沒有多餘的氛圍362Please respect copyright.PENANAjiB9SmTms7
而藉由水果方式提升(味覺)362Please respect copyright.PENANAsv63E8hadB
我想更是使閱讀來能有另一種味道,而不止是品詩這麼簡單362Please respect copyright.PENANASYPT09DSOa
而是是人在食用時能入口即化362Please respect copyright.PENANAjJ7NyJBbXX
362Please respect copyright.PENANARjDtKBJZLf
362Please respect copyright.PENANAiVyrraN0RJ
「嘗試把心臟調慢」362Please respect copyright.PENANA0xcxRe0QlK
我尤以喜歡這句,心臟當然不會跳動變慢,但內心(精神)的感覺卻可以,慢而持久362Please respect copyright.PENANAxXghrrSVi8
使人不會因為時間的洪流362Please respect copyright.PENANA52cSJuQH37
失去了炙熱362Please respect copyright.PENANAKyj99wftM0
362Please respect copyright.PENANAtXiMtkVLWx
362Please respect copyright.PENANAetGz4pmAUu
詩名為《夏,冬眠》362Please respect copyright.PENANAHc2nNgxq2T
但夏季怎麼會有雪362Please respect copyright.PENANA5YpNPhEbE3
令人加以反思362Please respect copyright.PENANARFWjG1SxwV
雪季不該有的畫面362Please respect copyright.PENANAlpQCy2WtH5
卻如那噠噠的馬蹄聲,走過歲月的容顏362Please respect copyright.PENANACP00UDQuAw
362Please respect copyright.PENANAWRIJMMyyWR
或許362Please respect copyright.PENANA1YNsqq1Hsw
不只這個夏季呼吸充滿著冰凍的雪氣362Please respect copyright.PENANA3QHLzkQgTs
即便是來年362Please respect copyright.PENANAsHoxRDsA7s
之後的每一年都依然如此
362Please respect copyright.PENANARRbdD4UWok
【2】 Nølav 挪拉夫 $3000
▶#102 戀夏
▶語評
情有幾分、愛有幾分,情愛一生只不過是貪戀癡嗔。362Please respect copyright.PENANAEqZVxByNOg
如那鄭少秋歌詞裡的悲傷優柔,我仍沐浴在這片刻的悸夏蕩漾之間,正如首段那句夜星彌留著如你的容顏,這會令人更加拌佐孤寂的味道,與憶起漸行漸遠的那伊人。362Please respect copyright.PENANAo5YIWRhYqQ
362Please respect copyright.PENANArgpo1nT7An
我打江南走過,卻仍等候的是你季節裡的容顏如島國般夏風。362Please respect copyright.PENANAs3RAkyhS8V
猶如鹹濕海風,亦如她漆黑雙眸之間是否仍容下有你的一隅。362Please respect copyright.PENANAmU2V84LmgR
又如我吱吱的淺吻聲是美麗的衝動。362Please respect copyright.PENANAM8ZWG52iAS
我不是歸人,是個過客。夏季仍舊是夏季。362Please respect copyright.PENANAJVyzvmYkBq
362Please respect copyright.PENANA1wZTr3NUM1
景物依然,妳卻不然。362Please respect copyright.PENANAAbF9epXkNq
多年已逝,歲月靜好不在。362Please respect copyright.PENANATqjqoHyUUS
更多的是此刻的情殤。362Please respect copyright.PENANA1ASuO8kJuB
362Please respect copyright.PENANAh9T2YdbyZT
而長生殿上楊玉環,幽怨了千年至今仍迴盪那長恨歌。362Please respect copyright.PENANATJRHTDu01G
又是否譬如我此時的心思呢?362Please respect copyright.PENANAqUA7Hd2IQo
春霧與東嶺再臨我又是否安然平靜呢?362Please respect copyright.PENANAcY1bZRkZUa
362Please respect copyright.PENANAGnIzTXvylo
362Please respect copyright.PENANAAYkCFoDGi9
夏季,這絢麗。362Please respect copyright.PENANAkuL5q93QpI
如曇花一現的煙花。362Please respect copyright.PENANA8SWf0OPlDE
就讓今夜重燃內心那苗火吧!
362Please respect copyright.PENANAn2uD8xacs3
【3】霧散、秋殘 $2000
▶#12 夏
▶語評
詩詞中區分為序、插、終。362Please respect copyright.PENANAFjN5p1frk2
同如起、轉、合三處意境。362Please respect copyright.PENANAYSnQIJZFpM
362Please respect copyright.PENANA1GmEYn6wQu
以古詩破題,新詩釋義自己情意。362Please respect copyright.PENANAKmIshxR0wx
362Please respect copyright.PENANAxoPMuSXG6N
六月、七月的芒夏荷香四溢,令人心曠神怡流連忘返。362Please respect copyright.PENANA4d5idoPraM
362Please respect copyright.PENANA47A7aSRa3H
卻不知這竟是否為大夢誰先覺,夢醒一場空呢?
362Please respect copyright.PENANADGLRGTMo2h
【4】宅米蟲子 $1500
▶#157 殘夏中秋(樂府詩)
▶語評
三生三世皆躲不過命運的輪迴362Please respect copyright.PENANAOluULxnztv
夢裡百花卻也沒妳的笑顏盛開362Please respect copyright.PENANAyqqsB5qFXF
362Please respect copyright.PENANAUJp7aQGiio
細雨紛飛絕情綿綿362Please respect copyright.PENANADsUFyC2uuj
句中江畔相隨362Please respect copyright.PENANAU6VjdsH6Gv
卻又未知天意是何在362Please respect copyright.PENANA2BAGoDiWEc
362Please respect copyright.PENANAPXLsJxuaij
即便是狂嘯 悲歌362Please respect copyright.PENANANH67pBF1hh
天上繁星 銀河362Please respect copyright.PENANAuoqSB6PGAl
也僅是萬千世界的一粟362Please respect copyright.PENANAJsGf9w4wSx
卻找不出能取掉你的其一362Please respect copyright.PENANADsDvBRoOpj
362Please respect copyright.PENANAoNbr1loaaG
從回到閣樓362Please respect copyright.PENANAZEXRh2sU7u
又再次漫步獨醉362Please respect copyright.PENANAI4FigfiDA4
是心裡的牽掛令人陶醉362Please respect copyright.PENANA6sjOUNU5bE
還是物理的酒精使人沉醉362Please respect copyright.PENANA4230XDEef2
早已在你染塵衣袖分不清了362Please respect copyright.PENANA6jZmsTwWQK
362Please respect copyright.PENANAPKcunXnl5s
黃泉彼岸花開,所引出的火照之路362Please respect copyright.PENANANJCZwmPNQc
也不過只是再次三世362Please respect copyright.PENANAQa81aoYJVk
與妳再相逢的一場作戲罷了
362Please respect copyright.PENANAHvpCq2SuBZ
【5】 艾米莉 $1500
▶#3 仲夏夢華
▶語評
《仲夏夜之夢》A Midsummer Night's Dream源自於文藝復興文豪莎士比亞創作的浪漫喜劇。362Please respect copyright.PENANAWvhNgZGTqs
「仲夏夜」指的是一年之中白晝最長的夏至前後,相傳這一天晚上是精靈活躍的時刻,會有許多不可思議的奇幻事情發生。362Please respect copyright.PENANACUKpXKh2iA
在PENANA的賴群組中求教 #闇夜星河 #星秤 兩位,得知原是精靈的惡作劇進而造成了這場愛恨糾葛的多角關係。362Please respect copyright.PENANAQRl0fguPXP
(感謝科普。)362Please respect copyright.PENANADDi7hdKLHF
362Please respect copyright.PENANAVKc4mswgPf
然而在十多年前求學階段,魚魚第一次聽到仲夏夜這個詞,並不在西洋古典所見到,反而是在《xxxholic》、《TSUBASA翼》這部早期神作中看到一詞;接續再次聽到是在我大學選修一堂《神話英語》的課程再次聽到。362Please respect copyright.PENANAriLUK1usBh
在高中時期,熱愛小說、動漫、電玩的我,這些是我課後逐漸成為作家(廢人)的養分來源,這些過往我們就暫且不再說明。362Please respect copyright.PENANAiB7FTyfHBY
362Please respect copyright.PENANAlp8mMFcK6X
AMYS大的新詩中,可以從簡樸日常的景物,如枝頭樹影、街道行人、沙灘繁星再到湖滔漣漪等,想像的到,這對戀人從初視、打傘、相依直至心底的共鳴。362Please respect copyright.PENANAmcj0G55unq
簡單的美好,竟可以這般簡單。362Please respect copyright.PENANAS2QwfMubiC
如梁靜茹<為我好>專輯內,像剝橘子這般簡單的幸福,可以唾手可得的滿足,也或許對某些人來說非常的困難。這些取決在於人的內心想法。362Please respect copyright.PENANAHqSGfNCzOZ
362Please respect copyright.PENANAvqYdr7UpUT
仲夏之間少了點的是激情。362Please respect copyright.PENANAunpjHA1jcF
仲夏之間多出些的是清淡。362Please respect copyright.PENANAdhhuOdgS91
檯面下的暗流湧動,或許僅只是讀者所看不到的他們內心的洶湧。362Please respect copyright.PENANAGPhv5VwiRE
362Please respect copyright.PENANAkYN148Pmtz
而我只知,仲夏夢宴正演奏著一道清新的情愛。
362Please respect copyright.PENANAy1CssyRU6f
【6】紫小絢 $1000
▶#51 花夢之無聲
▶語評
無語的花瓣,自小嚮往著自由綻放的藍天白雲,夏蟬與飛鳥的佐伴。曾經多麼遙想著那份追逐的渴望。
362Please respect copyright.PENANAcVV7Jj2IHj
與其說是羨慕,倒是幾分憤世嫉俗的意味所在。362Please respect copyright.PENANAOL046pGWwY
362Please respect copyright.PENANAMYqwmWjSgr
直至,雨過天青,才發覺原來自己仍舊擁有著雨滴的相擁。362Please respect copyright.PENANAJfmqZFz4nx
而我們又何必在意那天空藍呢?
362Please respect copyright.PENANAUe4nivVaRY
【7】宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#78 兩世笙花
▶語評
五月成熟的梅樹,透過初夏將其青梅韻開酒香該是多麼令人陶醉的畫面,而再多上幾株該採下的花枝,豈不樂乎?362Please respect copyright.PENANApxv5e13eBS
362Please respect copyright.PENANA0uGhrnqHr4
一抹玄龍劃破了淡薄的心防。362Please respect copyright.PENANAFZlvmmB8Nt
美景再好都無法平息,我倆的已然造成的誤解。362Please respect copyright.PENANAl6OGUR36DW
白華如是一道流星墜落,墜落於重生與你的羈絆。362Please respect copyright.PENANAEbUknUTNVD
362Please respect copyright.PENANA37k6TIBm6h
而在反覆讀完了宅米蟲子<兩世笙花>後,想起了兩世輪迴的仙履奇緣,其中經典的一段台詞:「曾經有一段真摯的愛情在我面前,但我沒有去珍惜,直到失去了以後才後悔莫及,塵世間最痛苦的莫過於此......」362Please respect copyright.PENANA06oqS6ZhZw
362Please respect copyright.PENANATCjD8S1O5v
造物弄人,倆世為人而今生卻與你交杯喝上壺合丞酒,可為多少輩子所修來的福分。362Please respect copyright.PENANAMwLjUPosQc
362Please respect copyright.PENANA1lx0M0gZoE
前世,已放下。362Please respect copyright.PENANA3fqDoojfPC
今來,是泛起了一水漣漪。362Please respect copyright.PENANAyq0X2mHhlW
362Please respect copyright.PENANAAQB89lei67
如不是身分所牽絆,我便放棄了所有與你共赴天崖海角。
362Please respect copyright.PENANABlcituIAyK
【8】Nicolea $1000
▶#121 夏
▶語評
夏季田園的美好景色,映襯著一片祥和的欣欣向榮。362Please respect copyright.PENANAKHOatDR9QM
如同中學時期讀過了一首宋代曾做《頌》詩:362Please respect copyright.PENANAwS6VpCqEV3
「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪。若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」362Please respect copyright.PENANAvbQXQIUerc
362Please respect copyright.PENANAic8IofRjsM
而這份難得的清幽,確實隨著年齡的增長。362Please respect copyright.PENANAluGaPNwozD
越是得來不易。362Please respect copyright.PENANAXmjsHCKiCu
362Please respect copyright.PENANA99NoW0AnDF
田中牧童的玉笛繚繞著蟬聲裊裊。362Please respect copyright.PENANANgmBCSlXmR
這該是人生如何的片刻煙花璀璨。362Please respect copyright.PENANA3FKY6OEroR
只得盼望,人生還能再得這般閒情逸致。
362Please respect copyright.PENANAItHxYmRcSU
【9】胡殷 $1000
▶#137 鳳凰花
▶語評
夏季雖為離別時節,卻也是人生成長的必經道路。362Please respect copyright.PENANAZ8qOudXAoc
眼淚是曖昧的催化劑,也是愛情的火藥。362Please respect copyright.PENANAegydlDBltq
人走茶未涼卻為下一次再相遇時而香。362Please respect copyright.PENANAMFTMW2kpzR
如我們未盡的緣分這般。362Please respect copyright.PENANAmn1ffmhbdJ
362Please respect copyright.PENANAIVYyLwdsnJ
362Please respect copyright.PENANAWUdi4xLBXa
相親相見知何日,此時此夜難為情。362Please respect copyright.PENANAxksvkg8Vq3
而我卻因這片花落,這道蟬聲所困惑。362Please respect copyright.PENANAYydWxiFmvP
即便歷經了離別後夏風的迎撫,也無法抽離曾經的嬉戲。362Please respect copyright.PENANAk4FjXKZBjP
362Please respect copyright.PENANApdJLUG9L5H
362Please respect copyright.PENANAV277tHLbxx
妳與我是否曾有探險過那道友誼塹壁後的道路。362Please respect copyright.PENANAYY1YVU4mwz
我並不知情。362Please respect copyright.PENANA4E3513IAGT
也不再無從得知。362Please respect copyright.PENANAxOCgs9QlYe
362Please respect copyright.PENANAsRsy5aXMEs
362Please respect copyright.PENANAjRJoU4Umlm
「隻身回望太匆匆,此生多少情與仇。362Please respect copyright.PENANALx00S4Y3HZ
無邊絲雨細如愁,朝來寒雨幾回眸。」362Please respect copyright.PENANAEX4s1snBsQ
只得對空一嘆,老天給予了我們太短的夢醒時分。362Please respect copyright.PENANAzZ3tkHxW4h
此刻,我只擁著憶起最後鳳凰花下,妳牽起我的悸動,約定未忘的誓言罷了。362Please respect copyright.PENANAFXRyUWGoxN
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未來,我們還會有機會再見嗎?來世,我們還會續緣嗎?還是,我只個過客?
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【10】林賾流 $1000
▶#83 烈陽之影
▶語評
開篇以豔陽不可直視362Please respect copyright.PENANA5VOO0orBkE
寫出了真實的太陽給予人的強盛362Please respect copyright.PENANAoW8q6Ayz51
並以柔和手法,側寫隨著時間經過,很快又能再見到的期待362Please respect copyright.PENANAOZk3XzooF1
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而在萬里無雲的日常362Please respect copyright.PENANAfLE7L1NSb0
大地照耀出了你的光芒362Please respect copyright.PENANAHPC3CkpH13
只想著短暫沒有你的存在362Please respect copyright.PENANA34iUdYR2a9
與緬懷影子的並行362Please respect copyright.PENANAwFiKVNEq4U
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而東升初陽如一雙碩壯的大手362Please respect copyright.PENANAroKyne5IKx
敲響了人群一日的序幕362Please respect copyright.PENANAwcufBKN6tP
島與海362Please respect copyright.PENANA3Jjly1hnZP
又為何區分你、我呢362Please respect copyright.PENANAI0IdQVuUx4
如同我仰望著巍峨的山峰山鋒也正仰望著你362Please respect copyright.PENANAAZdszUUXuZ
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隨著四季的變化362Please respect copyright.PENANAvjxCgPqodk
夏季卻是此刻我影跡糾纏最久時362Please respect copyright.PENANADtzd0QcqR2
直至,我忘卻了
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那個我
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【佳作1】 宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#170 夏祈杳杳
▶語評
本篇相對於前兩篇樂府詩362Please respect copyright.PENANATUnvSqnNH9
詩意要較為薄弱362Please respect copyright.PENANAonTQzm7MZB
但仍是一首很棒的古詩
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之所以我認為相對較弱的部分362Please respect copyright.PENANAjp72cYhKyY
是其意境 與用詞的閱讀感362Please respect copyright.PENANAmkuzZxpjp2
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【兩世笙花】、【殘夏中秋】中皆有一個顯眼的主題,但在【夏祈杳杳】中以花鋪景,望卻天上星闕流露出了一絲孤寂與深沉的感受。362Please respect copyright.PENANAQsYot453Zo
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或許是【兩世笙花】的一抹玄龍劃破淡薄心防,思念太深。362Please respect copyright.PENANAZhflG0PlYy
也許是【殘夏中秋】的細雨紛飛絕情綿綿,景色太美。362Please respect copyright.PENANA9Rdjt44qJk
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再嗑完了兩份深沉的憂愁後,重回到了【夏祈杳杳】,別有另外一種,希望來年梧桐花開,伊人會再來的期望。362Please respect copyright.PENANAOOVxYK9KVv
更多是抱持著,能夠等待,並且那人是可以等得到的感受。362Please respect copyright.PENANAQKQSkUxrxy
故此,以其作為比較下,兩者意境高低立判。362Please respect copyright.PENANAI50dkm8Mko
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當然,宅米的詩無庸置疑放在蕉園上都是罕有敵手,皆為佳作。362Please respect copyright.PENANArOXuVArFVq
詩的優缺,僅憑讀者當下的心境去解讀。362Please respect copyright.PENANAA64m6LW6xX
每個人的角度皆為不同。362Please respect copyright.PENANAjgN31YNAkT
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有人感受深刻,362Please respect copyright.PENANA5PqVfx5eVB
有人無感,362Please respect copyright.PENANATxbiPo8yQu
各有差異。362Please respect copyright.PENANASjd4Vu91NG
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而我僅是那茫茫人海中,362Please respect copyright.PENANA3l3emAkyfd
因其而感受到詩中情摯所渲染一名騷客。
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【佳作2】柏木桐柊 $1000
▶#58 也許我還會夢見你
▶語評
或許,她的影跡已成過往。窗櫺映入柔情似水,而匯聚成今夜的輾轉難眠。362Please respect copyright.PENANA4b4tl7pURW
我望不及妳眼底的星空漫步,而夏季裡還仍猶存妳餘溫。妳說的那些在我的世界又算得是什麼,留下的不過是在保險櫃裡的一抹笑意。我早已分不清,夏日我倆是否曾約定過,而捧上手中代表著祝福的黃玫瑰。362Please respect copyright.PENANA0hZAQIPjKK
這不代表著我倆有過曾經。夏夜裡。獨自釀著夢中還偶然遇見的妳。362Please respect copyright.PENANA7wc0beHUzs
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柏木桐柊文筆能力在短短數筆之下,運用了大量的暗喻及景色來比擬離情的傷感。醪、櫺兩字都是極其罕見的同義字,在詩句之間也靈活運用自己的特色
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【佳作3】 余軍 $1000
▶#139 七夕夜茫茫
▶語評
銀燭秋光冷畫屏,輕羅小扇撲流螢。362Please respect copyright.PENANATuhHXfMHmm
天階夜色涼如水,臥看牽牛織女星。362Please respect copyright.PENANAzDYjT4kIAp
即便過了一千兩百年,我們仍可想見在宮中拿著圓扇揮舞著螢火蟲的宮女,是幾般哀愁著,在涼意襲人的季夏中,孤獨賞月。362Please respect copyright.PENANAktJ74QrD79
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每每七夕時分總是容易遭受羨煞旁人的眷侶炸眼球。362Please respect copyright.PENANA2Mfh7xDg5Y
而這對於此刻孤寂的人,將變得更加孤寂萬分。362Please respect copyright.PENANAZKt8ld6aa1
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也許,他仍等待著茫茫人中那個她。362Please respect copyright.PENANAnbRB3n8xYO
也許,他只不過是她生命中的過客。362Please respect copyright.PENANAwi7cFHzyDS
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偷偷遙望著,她的限時動態。362Please respect copyright.PENANAgsOi4TU1qt
悄悄祝福著,她的喜訊分享。362Please respect copyright.PENANAx6ClJW7tDA
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七夕。362Please respect copyright.PENANAiBQHOyOK0p
是個情感放大百倍的敏感時節。362Please respect copyright.PENANAoLKjLUmUko
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在銀河伴隨著夜幕,總是能不經意地想起了某個她。362Please respect copyright.PENANAhbhI6qkp4w
或許,這才是那年盛夏,最難忘的約定了吧。
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【佳作4】虛冲 $1000
▶#228 仲夏夜之詩
▶語評
道長這首寫實敘事的打油詩362Please respect copyright.PENANAhtbcHvnGSP
用道地口吻方式呈現362Please respect copyright.PENANAHpR8WTAWVr
別有一番令人感同身受的味道362Please respect copyright.PENANAoPOR4js42O
362Please respect copyright.PENANAFzE4Ra6t1N
華麗的新詩固然有深沈362Please respect copyright.PENANAu8CIt0Tkvq
反覆咀嚼的口感362Please respect copyright.PENANAVJOVu5JuzU
但相較於打油詩362Please respect copyright.PENANAJl6V48lN7p
卻更能反映生活上的記趣362Please respect copyright.PENANAVaQVFuNE7T
又或者應該說是上班藍領族的無奈吧!362Please respect copyright.PENANACGtSnFf7DC
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夏季沉悶、炙熱362Please respect copyright.PENANAuHiWxINnS0
而很難讓人能對於煩躁事情362Please respect copyright.PENANAqqAiGjBs7k
保持理性與忍耐362Please respect copyright.PENANA3Lu3wIumgk
故此,我們應該適時調整自己步伐
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抬起頭來362Please respect copyright.PENANA2MF73nV4PC
深深吸一口氣362Please respect copyright.PENANA6pMlV4LDm3
靜下來看一下周遭的事物362Please respect copyright.PENANAgewoIzmVQZ
仍舊有著許多美好的細節
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【佳作5】胤宸 $1000
▶#53 那時風若來
▶語評
花自飄零水自流。362Please respect copyright.PENANAxeRfT5C2uL
一種相思,兩處閒愁。362Please respect copyright.PENANAdIbFAZbcxH
此情無計可消除,才下眉頭,卻上心頭。362Please respect copyright.PENANAbex0IfE27u
同如<<李清照>>的一剪梅,而這西湖庭院盈滿的荷風又與易安居士筆下那殘荷,抽象暨不易捉摸的思想感情相較,誰更勝一籌呢?362Please respect copyright.PENANA8WXiSDBAlx
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獨賞荷葉,飄蕩於塘邊,一抹光照滑過一池漣漪。362Please respect copyright.PENANARI2nyKAOjV
卻無心這番閒情逸致,內心仍未那尚未赴約的風而風,掛記了心頭,酒、荷、影皆為而動,卻因那三缺一的風美中不足。362Please respect copyright.PENANA0zYGjamHbx
慧開禪師那經典一句「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪,若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」 362Please respect copyright.PENANA0t76pcacUj
而其中「若無閒事在心頭」更是把心中沒有掛慮,便是好時節詮釋的淋漓盡致。362Please respect copyright.PENANACTkfYqTzX5
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人生在世,總為數不清的事情苦惱、煩躁,如果可真心放下了這些東西,簡直美麗得太過不要了。362Please respect copyright.PENANAMU3tXM8ELt
風,是否能在夏日再次吹拂。362Please respect copyright.PENANAJG2RtaYIuR
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我們仍未可知。362Please respect copyright.PENANAHrS5e8YEkm
但卻明白另一事,眼前這番美酒,如果可以那便今朝有酒今朝醉吧。
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【複評未上榜】
▶#55 薰夏誓約,詩綺永存 ▶#176 逃夏 ▶#194 致逝去的夏
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特殊獎項
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【最佳電腦繪畫獎】LiCh 阿立 $3000
▶#195 Sunny Come Back
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【最佳創作金曲獎】W.H. $3000
▶#212 夏之熱力學
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感謝贊助本場創作挑戰的各路金主
Penana小熊 15500P!!!!!!
伍拾陸 5600P!!
月亮熊 5000P!!
夏坂Moonight 5000P!!
InDeeeer 4000P!!
容霜 3000P!
谷映塵(員外) 2000P!
W.H. 2000P!
笑具 1500P!
知閒言炎 1000P!
筆墨談兵 1000P!
Sandy 1000P!
悲艾 1000P!
月月 800P!
宅米蟲子 起源 Nicolea 葉月晉久HS 墨云 巫尚益 100-200P
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本期創挑心得
(1)是的,由於這個評比斷斷續續,歷經了接近一年的時間,在時效性上早已失去了觀眾的熱誠,途中發現有些人已經退出PENANA。
其中我感到最惋惜的是夏坂Moonight老師,他在本期的3篇作品都是上乘的好文,由於我的拖延症,讓大家失去了能讀上更好作品的機會。
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(2)排名評比,是我的閱讀程度與個人感觀去排序,或許,你會覺得為何他的作品比我好呢?
這邊,我歡迎大家都能提出討論。
不希望反而因為排名,引發筆戰,那就失去了開心創作本身的意義了。
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(3)本期在#195樓LiCh 阿立大大的「Sunny Come Back」,是我開始創作挑戰以來,收到最大得驚喜了,我萬萬想不到竟然會有這麼精彩的投稿,讓我當下受寵若驚,太幸福了吧。
各位,如果喜歡歡迎到LICH大的粉絲專頁,拜讀他的作品。
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(4)分數上,本次我並沒有參用到「閱讀數」或是「喜歡數」這個數據,因為我怕會對於文筆上的排名失準,不過我還是先將我初評、複評的經過都貼上來給各位看看。
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(5)好啦,廢話有點多。
這邊希望大家都能去我得其他幾個創作挑戰看看。
如果你們喜歡的話,都幫我書籤起來吧!
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另外
已經開始,各位準備磨拳擦掌吧!!!!!!!!
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如果可以幫我打賞本篇(會當作下期獎金)
為下期創挑添上一份心力XD
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謝謝~362Please respect copyright.PENANA8DCafCLNba